on The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
17 Feb 2003, 12:05 PM
Superb(e)!
on Sharks For Libido by scitz
16 Feb 2003, 7:15 AM
Too long to be a haiku but the images are good.
on Gloria's Falling Sun by OneFingerAnswer
16 Feb 2003, 6:56 AM
Neat work, and you've got possibly the best username on this site!
replying on His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger
16 Feb 2003, 6:54 AM
Thanks Cad, I'll have a look about for the names given to destructive winds and I'll edit this in a few days or so because this is (as it says) a draft. I never actually thought of 4 winds, thank you for the idea.
Ta.
Ta.
on Prelude to a Legend by ThoughtfulSoul
16 Feb 2003, 12:34 AM
There are some great lines in here, but too much unnecessary description of feeling (as god'swife says). I can see that you'll make a good writer or poet if you try. This deserves a 7, ideas and images are there, they just need to be selected and emphasised more (yeah, I know, emotion's a bastard to get down onto paper, I can't do it very well. Actually I can't write poetry very well. Oh well.)
on Parting the Curtains by Blue Magpie
16 Feb 2003, 12:12 AM
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
replying on Beauty, sleeping by Ranger
16 Feb 2003, 12:07 AM
Yeah, the whole thing is a bit random. The big question is: do you get those lines?
replying on My Mind by Deb_djb3113
16 Feb 2003, 12:02 AM
Fear of Garbage? Damn fine name.
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
15 Feb 2003, 5:03 PM
There are some brilliant images in here, not all of them go together, but sod it, who cares? Good stuff. 9
on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos
15 Feb 2003, 4:49 PM
Nice
on The Errant Knight by Thyme
13 Feb 2003, 12:46 PM
Very nice indeed! 9
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
10 Feb 2003, 12:49 PM
Mr. Christof, this is one of the finest works of poetry that I've ever seen...you, sir, are a genius. May I ask as to whose poems you draw inspiration from? This is the template for the poems that I would love to write but don't have the ability-pleeeease let me know how you learnt to write like this! 10
on Of Bobjims (An actual poem this time!?!) by Bobjim
10 Feb 2003, 12:42 PM
Ahhhh, that inventiveness all the way from -
I wish you the best of luck in the future-my wish is the only hope you've got!
Ahahahahaha. Quite.
I wish you the best of luck in the future-my wish is the only hope you've got!
Ahahahahaha. Quite.
on Star Bright by x311
5 Feb 2003, 12:45 PM
I quite like this...it's not so depressing, but yeah, it's cool. I don't think that you'll get a good vote from poetandknowit, somehow.
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on Mississipi Murder by scitz
5 Feb 2003, 12:43 PM
Nice.
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
8
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
8
on immaculate perception by w~* ATHENA *~w
5 Feb 2003, 12:40 PM
Do you listen to Black Sabbath, Athena?
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
on Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer
5 Feb 2003, 12:34 PM
Nice proverb aside from the syllables.