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Whales (Haiku) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
A whale's suicide. Beaching herself with eyes wide. Cleaner than Ocean. Dry docked whale boat. Captain strikes match off his leg. Leaning on that bone. Boy visits sea world. Falls into Killer Whale tank. The whales save his life.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3846154
Weighted score: 6.012235
Overall Rank: 1232
Posted: February 15, 2003 4:13 PM PST; Last modified: April 30, 2003 12:42 AM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 81.132.2.157 | 15-Feb-03/4:49 PM | Reply
Nice
[7] <~> @ 67.84.174.185 | 26-Feb-03/8:39 PM | Reply
S3 is way out of place, h.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.14 > <~> | 30-Apr-03/5:37 AM | Reply
no it isn't Z. it's the pressure poignt.
[5] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 | 5-Mar-03/1:32 AM | Reply
I remember in third grade I wrote

Save the whales
Save them all
Save the whales
Big and small

I thought I was a genius. I later found out I was wrong.

"All(1)+ people(2)+ are(1)+ flawed(2)" = 6.
Maybe...
"All people are flaws"
It's a little harsher but it fits.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > OneFingerAnswer | 5-Mar-03/1:49 AM | Reply
Why is flawed two? say it. does it sound like two to you. Would whaled be two too?
[5] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > horus8 | 5-Mar-03/5:19 PM | Reply
Yes and yes. But you're the author so if it doesn't to you then whatever.
[8] richa @ 195.92.67.68 | 30-Apr-03/11:09 AM | Reply
Like this, worthy of haiku
[4] Garrett S Sexton @ 213.122.87.12 | 30-Apr-03/1:27 PM | Reply
Wale's are shit at rugby too. I liked the end,it made a nice change.4
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 > Garrett S Sexton | 30-Apr-03/2:54 PM | Reply
Not as shit as Oxford, by jove - we gave them an utter bosching at rugger last term!
[6] w~* ATHENA *~w @ 64.12.96.237 | 1-May-03/10:44 PM | Reply
nice from a leo, whales are safe.

what of a lion in a dog pit.

just finished a good read from clive barker.

ask me.
[6] w~* ATHENA *~w @ 64.12.96.237 | 1-May-03/10:45 PM | Reply
nice from a leo, whales are safe.

what of a lion in a dog pit.

just finished a good read from clive barker.

ask me.
[8] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.66.6 | 23-May-03/10:30 AM | Reply
line 1 and two rhyming is a distraction. haiku 2 and three are freakin' awesome, worth a doubloon apeice.
[3] ChaseValentine @ 199.79.168.160 | 26-Apr-05/3:53 PM | Reply
That last haiku seems really awkward and out of place with the other two.
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