Whales

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Feb 2003 · Edited 30 Apr 2003 · 13 comments

A whale's suicide. Beaching herself with eyes wide. Cleaner than Ocean. Dry docked whale boat. Captain strikes match off his leg. Leaning on that bone. Boy visits sea world. Falls into Killer Whale tank. The whales save his life.

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[8] Ranger 15-Feb-03/4:49 PM Reply

Nice

[7] <~> 26-Feb-03/8:39 PM Reply

S3 is way out of place, h.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › <~> 30-Apr-03/5:37 AM Reply

no it isn't Z. it's the pressure poignt.

[5] OneFingerAnswer 5-Mar-03/1:32 AM Reply

I remember in third grade I wrote

Save the whales
Save them all
Save the whales
Big and small

I thought I was a genius. I later found out I was wrong.

"All(1)+ people(2)+ are(1)+ flawed(2)" = 6.
Maybe...
"All people are flaws"
It's a little harsher but it fits.

[n/a] horus8 › OneFingerAnswer 5-Mar-03/1:49 AM Reply

Why is flawed two? say it. does it sound like two to you. Would whaled be two too?

[5] OneFingerAnswer › horus8 5-Mar-03/5:19 PM Reply

Yes and yes. But you're the author so if it doesn't to you then whatever.

[8] richa 30-Apr-03/11:09 AM Reply

Like this, worthy of haiku

[4] Garrett S Sexton 30-Apr-03/1:27 PM Reply

Wale's are shit at rugby too. I liked the end,it made a nice change.4

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Garrett S Sexton 30-Apr-03/2:54 PM Reply

Not as shit as Oxford, by jove - we gave them an utter bosching at rugger last term!

[6] w~* ATHENA *~w 1-May-03/10:44 PM Reply

nice from a leo, whales are safe.

what of a lion in a dog pit.

just finished a good read from clive barker.

ask me.

[6] w~* ATHENA *~w 1-May-03/10:45 PM Reply

nice from a leo, whales are safe.

what of a lion in a dog pit.

just finished a good read from clive barker.

ask me.

[8] Robert K Foster 23-May-03/10:30 AM Reply

line 1 and two rhyming is a distraction. haiku 2 and three are freakin' awesome, worth a doubloon apeice.

[3] ChaseValentine 26-Apr-05/3:53 PM Reply

That last haiku seems really awkward and out of place with the other two.