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Whales (Haiku) by Jeremi B. Handrinos A whale's suicide.
Beaching herself with eyes wide.
Cleaner than Ocean.
Dry docked whale boat.
Captain strikes match off his leg.
Leaning on that bone.
Boy visits sea world.
Falls into Killer Whale tank.
The whales save his life.
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Posted: February 15, 2003 4:13 PM PST; Last modified: April 30, 2003 12:42 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.012235 Overall Rank: 1247 Comments:
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15-Feb-03/4:49 PM
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Nice
S3 is way out of place, h.
no it isn't Z. it's the pressure poignt.
I remember in third grade I wrote
Save the whales Save them all Save the whales Big and small I thought I was a genius. I later found out I was wrong. "All(1)+ people(2)+ are(1)+ flawed(2)" = 6. Maybe... "All people are flaws" It's a little harsher but it fits.
Why is flawed two? say it. does it sound like two to you. Would whaled be two too?
Yes and yes. But you're the author so if it doesn't to you then whatever.
Like this, worthy of haiku
Wale's are shit at rugby too. I liked the end,it made a nice change.4
Not as shit as Oxford, by jove - we gave them an utter bosching at rugger last term!
nice from a leo, whales are safe.
what of a lion in a dog pit. just finished a good read from clive barker. ask me.
nice from a leo, whales are safe.
what of a lion in a dog pit. just finished a good read from clive barker. ask me.
line 1 and two rhyming is a distraction. haiku 2 and three are freakin' awesome, worth a doubloon apeice.
That last haiku seems really awkward and out of place with the other two.
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