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Free verse № 40359

Parting the Curtains

by Blue Magpie

Member since 2002 · Posted 14 Feb 2003 · 5 comments

Sunlight on a brick, and the waters of my soul wash across the street, filling insanely it with people faces. I turn again and the world is very small; it floats away on my tears. Loneliness is a drug and I am addicted.

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5 comments

[5] bsjones84 15-Feb-03/3:20 AM Reply
Kind of short and the thoughts don't seem to be collected
[5] deleted user 15-Feb-03/11:48 AM Reply
people's faces?
[n/a] Blue Magpie › deleted user 15-Feb-03/10:10 PM Reply
Ah Ianswriting
Yes thanks.
[8] Ranger 16-Feb-03/12:12 AM Reply
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway