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Parting the Curtains (Free verse) by Blue Magpie Sunlight on a brick,
and the waters of my soul
wash across the street,
filling insanely it with people faces.
I turn again
and the world is very small;
it floats away on my tears.
Loneliness is a drug
and I am addicted.
Up the ladder:
Found Lost
Down the ladder:
easy
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Posted: February 14, 2003 10:27 PM PST; Last modified: February 14, 2003 10:27 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.134471 Overall Rank: 5556 Comments:
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bsjones84 @ 68.67.13.69
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15-Feb-03/3:20 AM
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Kind of short and the thoughts don't seem to be collected
people's faces?
Ah Ianswriting
Yes thanks.
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway 209 view(s)
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