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Parting the Curtains
(
Free verse
) by
Blue Magpie
Sunlight on a brick, and the waters of my soul wash across the street, filling insanely it with people faces. I turn again and the world is very small; it floats away on my tears. Loneliness is a drug and I am addicted.
Ranger
16-Feb-03/12:12 AM
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
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