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Grampa's Proverb (Haiku) by OneFingerAnswer When man uses a flame
To kill a phoenix he makes
His new enemy
Up the ladder:
Farewell Song
Down the ladder:
The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.7777777
Posted: February 4, 2003 3:10 PM PST; Last modified: February 5, 2003 3:02 PM PSTWeighted score: 3.8357427 Overall Rank: 13478 Comments:
Nice proverb aside from the syllables.
phoenix...favorite bird. the only one i know that won't shit on my car. here, have a 9.
Check your first line.
the rest is complimentable.
I tried fixing that... Damn it. Oh well.
When (1) + man(1) + uses(2) + a(1) + flame(1)= 6. (a)You can't count, assmachine. (b)Dumb statement worthy only of "proverbs for dummies" books. (c)Poorly written, overall. Therefore, a zero.
Ere(1) can(2) i(3) ave(4) a(5) go(6) at(7) that(8)= ?
I don't count Romaplegicromcocking bumwagon driver.
I was just proving that onefinger is a hypocritical dicksmack. that and today is Constant Cursing Thursday!
and i was calling anuspickingringfinger a romaplegicromcocking bumwagon driver
I appreciate it. have some cookies, they're made with the souls of the damned and sugar.
Home-made I presume. Such expense ingredients for an undergrad. Care to swap recipes? I have make a mince-meat pie people just 'die' for, if you get my meaning...
Hey OneFinger, what if he uses a gun, knife, poison, etc. Does the bird still come out of it singing?
No please explain some more!
just logged on again to see what people have said, i'll keep on logging on and logging on and logging on and logging on and logging on logging on and logging on and logging on and logging on and logging on, de you get it yet?
a) Let's see. Can we read? I already said I tried editing it. Thank you anyway. b) Why give you a book of proverbs you don't understand? If I put it in that book you still wouldn't get the point. c) Rank how you want.
if you tried to edit it, you failed miserably.(b),that is the most shab-ass grade school attempt at a comeback I've ever read. worse than the rubber/glue thing. The poeme is bad. face it. last, I will continue to rank how I choose, sir.
"a" rather than "his" perhaps?
grandpa liked moonshine, didn't he?
6-7-5
Congrats you're the millionth person to not read the other comments. I tried editing it and it didn't take. I don't care to try again. Get off my ass.
Grandfather's Proverb (Haiku) by -=Dark_Angel=-
In his shaving vest Grandfather is more than old: He's a lunatic. 296 view(s)
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Still not bad.
How about:
"when man uses flame
to kill a phoenix, he makes
his own enemy"
or
"a new enemy"
Either way. Unless you don't care that it's not a Haiku, in which case, it's cool.