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Mississipi Murder (Other) by scitz
Dark hangs over daylight, A red scarred sky is dawning. No belief in wrong or right, Black sheeps shepherd warning. Tears that fall embrace him, As his son will face him. the darkest hearts in cloaks of white, That haunt the skin with frostbite. Fires are burning they won't stop, Three white men have just been shot, By there own creed, All becuase of an ethnic need. An investigation finds them, But the Ku Klux Klan reminds them, that Mississpi will always be white, and they'll burn the dark with flames of white. A children's scream unnoticed, Scarecrows flock the harvest, For Mississipi must be white, and a dead black brother will hold you tight. As the blacks hang and burn, tomorrows generation can only learn, that colors are'nt chosen by no man whose white, So thay must accept, or stand up and fight, That ebony and ivory, Is a sad Mississipi memory. (kind of inspired by Missipssi burning)

Up the ladder: The North Wind
Down the ladder: the day we met

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.5994534
Overall Rank: 2306
Posted: February 3, 2003 5:39 AM PST; Last modified: February 5, 2003 10:13 AM PST
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Comments:
[9] brazen @ 68.84.225.163 | 3-Feb-03/10:46 PM | Reply
you seem to have a talent for exposing the dramatically depressing side of american history...about damn time.
[8] Ranger @ 212.67.106.117 | 5-Feb-03/12:43 PM | Reply
Nice.
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
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[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 6-Feb-03/8:03 PM | Reply
you make me chuckle...you are hilarious..that part about mississippi and white and the kkk... wild stuff. have you been to a lyncing lately? i hear they're good for life reevaluating.
[7] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Feb-03/11:59 AM | Reply
Rosewood works better. It's got masons in it.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 3-Mar-03/4:09 PM | Reply
Negros have rights too, and this is proof.
[1] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 | 3-Mar-03/9:05 PM | Reply
1. Don't give a fuck what inspired it. 2. You rhymed shot by there own creed with "ethnic need". You took something serious and turned into a piece of shit, good work. If you're going to tackle big issues you could at least try a little harder.
[7] spank me baby yeah @ 62.105.88.10 > TanHand | 4-Mar-03/4:47 AM | Reply
WHY DO THEY CALL YOU TANHAND? IT BCOZ YOU KEEP FALLING THRU?
[7] spank me baby yeah @ 62.105.88.10 | 4-Mar-03/4:48 AM | Reply
THE FILM WAS CRAP BUT THIS IS NOT BAD 6
[6] bondjedi @ 12.228.21.93 | 20-Apr-03/12:22 PM | Reply
"sheeps"? And if you can't spell "Mississippi", then by all means use "MS". I give you a 6 because I'm a Gene Hackman fan.
[5] Poetsettle @ 68.158.170.115 | 18-May-03/10:25 AM | Reply
Sad memories...
[6] daniella @ 200.68.198.152 | 2-Jun-03/6:49 AM | Reply
excellent first draught. work this. mississippi
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.103 | 2-Jun-03/8:59 AM | Reply
great poeme! why not pay a little visit to my homepage?

http://www.kkk.com/index1.htm
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 2-Jun-03/11:57 AM | Reply
LOL! A-ha. Did you read the dirt on Martin Luther King? Hilarious. Really, this site is the cat's meow.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 > horus8 | 2-Jun-03/2:43 PM | Reply
You do realise that you are now on about ten squillion FBI suspect lists just for having visited that site? And I'll have you know that while Martin Luther King had rather disgusting beliefs concerning interracial marriage and ethnic rights, he was a loving and caring communist, and his reputation as a sexual pervert was beyond reproach!
[5] DJCARTER @ 138.180.90.46 | 24-Jul-03/3:01 AM | Reply
lot going on here
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 18-Aug-03/12:42 PM | Reply
why did the Ku Klux Klan go in that movie?
[5] Settle @ 67.75.22.253 | 20-Aug-03/5:59 AM | Reply
That explains why it sucks so much. Next time be inspired by Casablanca or the Seven Samurai or something, jesus.
[5] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 | 2-Sep-03/3:50 PM | Reply
Kind of good, kind of hard to read. I think you could revise this to something much better. Some of the ryme works and some of it is very hard to read. Good work for a first draft.
[3] Tintagiles @ 198.164.201.42 | 4-Sep-03/5:10 PM | Reply
A line break does not a comma necessitate.
[6] Jill Stockinger @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 27-Dec-20/4:33 PM | Reply
A child's scream OR children's screams (both plural)- "their own creed"-
some strong emotion captured, but not all lines are equal to the task. "a dead brother will hold you tight"- worth reworking. "tomorrow's generation" - "aren't"- Some people on this web site object to being told corrections, saying these are rough drafts. Rough drafts are fine- the corrections offered can help with the next draft.
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