Re: San Franscisco by John Rambo |
22-May-06/8:28 PM |
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Re: Descendent by MacFrantic |
22-May-06/8:26 PM |
Damn, that's a lot of rhyming...I hate that, but I guess I like it well enough for the words themselves.
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Re: Godproof Hat by Dovina |
22-May-06/8:24 PM |
I wish I had a God-proof hat. I always feel like He's watching me. Nice limerick.
On an unrelated topic, I'm ure glad I came back in time to see the return of Rockmage.
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Re: You can go no further. by Dovina |
11-May-06/4:01 PM |
What's this about the demise of the Ranker? I know I've been away, but that's no reason to close up shop ;)
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Re: The Right Call by Dovina |
21-Mar-06/7:44 PM |
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Re: Life Is Like A Rose by x0lovelylarnx0 |
21-Mar-06/7:42 PM |
Good thoughts, but it's all been said before and in a much better way. Try looking for new ways to express your thoughts. Instead of just letting it flow onto the page, think about the line and think how you can say it in a different way.
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Re: Muff by Stephen Robins |
21-Mar-06/7:39 PM |
"I swear I saw an ewok, Grinning between your legs," is the funniest thing I've ever heard. 8 - just for that.
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Re: One Too Many by ElmoBeavisButthead |
21-Mar-06/7:35 PM |
I don't really think I can give you any better advice than Ranger already has. Follow his lead.
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Re: a comment on Dashboard Jesus by wilco |
19-Mar-06/4:42 PM |
Line 3 seems to have given me all kinds of fits...I guess that's the peril of writing at 3AM.
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Re: Judged by Dovina |
19-Mar-06/1:40 AM |
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Re: Martijn by Chasz Misleading |
19-Mar-06/1:36 AM |
I think you misspelled Martin's name.
Seriously, though folks. I think if you want to poast this for others to read, maybe shorten it and make it a little more interesting. Otherwise just give it to Martijn.
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Re: Indiscrete by ecargo |
19-Mar-06/1:33 AM |
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Re: Looking Back by x0lovelylarnx0 |
19-Mar-06/1:25 AM |
Some good sentiments, but just not a very...ummm..daring? poem..just not too inventive...could be worked on and turned into something though.
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Re: Mid-July by Ranger |
19-Mar-06/1:20 AM |
I likes..you shall have a 9.
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Re: Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
19-Mar-06/1:11 AM |
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Re: Conflict Resolution by Dovina |
20-Feb-06/1:29 PM |
I really like this one. The third stanza is perfect, but I don't like the garage door.
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Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac |
13-Feb-06/1:48 PM |
Masters at pop music. The good kind.
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Re: Valentine by zodiac |
13-Feb-06/1:04 PM |
You're Carl newman from the New Pornographers aren't you..
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Re: Panic Slide by MacFrantic |
13-Feb-06/12:57 PM |
I'd like to see this formed into a more cohesive...um..thing..
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Re: Unless Redux by rahson_s |
13-Feb-06/12:50 PM |
I've seen you do better, but not bad. I think, though, if you're going to throw out the racial slurs, just go ahead and say niggers. "Niggas" makes it seem like you're trying to skirt the issue and use slang instead.
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