Re: a waste of time by hendrimike	13-Feb-06/12:47 PM
Doesn't really say much as a whole that couldn't have been said in one verse. Mybe that's the point...hey, it's a mainstream pop song!
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	13-Feb-06/12:40 PM
Thanks, I'm hoping I can keep that trend going with the actual music as well.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	10-Feb-06/1:33 PM
You're right and wrong. EVERYONE here doesn't spend a lot of time on their posts. It's been my experience that people generally just write the first thing that pops into their head, post it and then wonder why they've got a bunch of 4's. THat you spent an hour on it is a good start. Really, it's not about the amount of time you spend but just how much you put into it (If that makes any sense). The more you write and read, the better you'll get. Most of my early posts are complete ass (as are many of my more recent). Also, remember that we're all hacks or we wouldn't be posting here.
Re: writer's block by Zoetrope	10-Feb-06/1:26 PM
very nice..at first I was put off by the length (I have a short attention span), but you pulled it off nicely.
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	10-Feb-06/1:20 PM
pretty and all that
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	9-Feb-06/7:55 PM
and homosexual Scientology loving movie stars.
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	9-Feb-06/4:37 PM
Why do you always think that, because I'm from Tennessee, all my songs are country? ;)
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	9-Feb-06/4:35 PM
You're correct on the solstice thing...as for the vote average, if you've been here any length of time, you know that vote averages mean little on this site when gauging talent. Thanks, though ;). Yeah, I like the retired kite strings bit...my favorite line here along with the second half of the first stanze...I totally ripped the tune off from Death Cab for Cutie though..I gotta work on that...
Re: Tonight (edit) by drnick	9-Feb-06/4:30 PM
again, some cliches...and I think one thing that might hlp you is to get an idea of what you want to write..then work on how you want to say it..as opposed to letting the rhymes drive the poem as was said above.
Re: Lonely Road by drnick	9-Feb-06/4:25 PM
It just doesn't really do anything for me...it's not really bad and I wish I knew what to tell you to improve it...just feels tired...
Re: Faith on a cross by Caducus	9-Feb-06/4:20 PM
Not as good as the one i just read...but not bad.
Re: Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus	9-Feb-06/4:18 PM
I hate to keep heaping praise upon you because I'm sure your head is swelling as I write this, but I can't help it. I'l give it a 10 if you can make it longer and it's still this good.
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	9-Feb-06/4:09 PM
After reading the comments here and on a few other pages, I've realized that when you leave for a while and then come back..you have no clue whats going on anymore...nice poem by the way..Tommy likee
Re: cryogenicide necrobot by baphomet	9-Feb-06/4:05 PM
That's a lot of words to not be making any sense. I'm hnestly not sure if you're making up words or misspelling them,. but either ay, changing that would yield, I believe, a much better poem.
Re: Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	9-Feb-06/4:02 PM
I don't know....7?
Re: Pastry by Tirapasteles	9-Feb-06/3:59 PM
no can reada so no can vota
Re: Unless by rahson_s	9-Feb-06/3:39 PM
Some nice sentiments, but not a very entertaining read unless you're the one at which it's directed.
Re: run'em'hard by grendal	9-Feb-06/3:24 PM
It's like a retarded Dr. Seuss poem...no offense to you...It just doesn't make any sense.
Re: Monkey Tree (Breathless edit) by ecargo	9-Feb-06/3:20 PM
not bad, but the spacing is distracting and makes it harder to read than it should be.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	9-Feb-06/3:16 PM
excellent