I think it needs more unity--your images just sort of come out of nowhere (e.g., tracks, the desert, etc.). Don't let the rhymes drive the poem. Also, sometimes a near rhyme will serve you better than a straight, simple rhyme (e.g., "gray I comprehend/One that makes your mind expend"--expend here needs something that it modifies, an object, for one thing, so why not use expands or something instead. Contrary to popular belief, there are no rhyme police.)

The ending lines give you something to play with; get us there.

I was really high when I wrote this, which can be good and bad. I will keep in mind what you've said when I rework this. Thank you very much for the advice!

I'm not sure what "I want to push you away
with intent to invite" means...? that by pushing away, you know it will invite?
other than that...this is cool...I like that you leave things half said...and it is not hard to deduct the rest of what is not being said. Very good.

I love the ebb and flow of this poem!

'To such an extend there’s no more left' - should that not be 'extent'? You use 'away' twice ('push you away' and 'stolen away'). I think it would be better to use another word in the second instance.

If the desert swallows rain, where is its throat and more importantly itsstomach and bum.

Are you the doctor nick that deals with boys problems by prescribing them your book 'how to live with a willy'.

Very good, not original but done much better than most. The only suggestion I have is to change 'started' (line 8) to 'begun'...it's easier to read, other than that - excellent!

again, some cliches...and I think one thing that might hlp you is to get an idea of what you want to write..then work on how you want to say it..as opposed to letting the rhymes drive the poem as was said above.