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Tonight (edit) (Free verse) by drnick

Your eyes swallow pain Like the desert swallows rain I'm falling down down and back on my feet again A shade of gray I comprehend One that makes your mind expend I've stalled on the tracks and started a new trend In the dreary cold of winter's night You're my solemn bedside candlelight I want to push you away with intent to invite Alas, you've stolen my rhythmic breath To such an extent there’s no more left I'll be the willing victim to such a beautiful death

drnick 6-Feb-06/11:22 PM
That's exactly what I meant, ie playing hard to get. I try to stay away from directly saying things so the poem's meaning can be different for anyone. I usually fail at that. thanks for the input




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