Re: Partying Blind by poetry/poem101	9-Feb-06/3:11 PM
Well, I got through the first paragraph, but it's my feeling that if you want me to do you the courtesy of reading the whole thing and commenting and voting in a serious manner, the least you could do is run it through the spell checker.
Re: a comment on You Have It Backwards by LilMsLadyPoet	16-Dec-05/3:56 PM
1) Am I wrong in thinking that you have to have a Bachelor's Degree before you go to grad school? That's what they told me and I'm gonna be pissd If I found I I could have gotten here straight out of high school. I'm not trying to say anything bad about your mother (Lord knows that's just not right), but I'm just trying to figure this out. 2) People in America are scared every day..Have you been to an inner city housing project lately? Many of these people have no food, no heat, no water and any second a stray bullet could come through the window and take off the top of Little Billy's head. You wouldn't believe the things that these people come up with to make it through...from popping out babies like a Pez dispenser to get more welfare to making crap out of garbage and selling it to the white folks who think it's quaint. The point is that, people will invent regardless of their socioeconomic status and regardless of their freedom from "terror, horror and immediate harm".
Re: Privacy by Dovina	16-Dec-05/3:40 PM
I'm delighted that this isn't about religion...I do wish that you use a little punctuation...It just makes it easier to read, y'know.
Re: I love to see the sunrise by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/3:37 PM
The 2nd line of the second stanza and the 4th line of the third read a little awkwardly. It's simple and you could probably beef it up with a little imagery. Your thoughts are good, but the thing about poetry is that youu need to find an interesting new way to say it. For example, in the first stanza, instead of just tellign us you love the sunrise because each day is exciting and new, tell us why...
Re: Lost Identity by TLRufener	16-Dec-05/3:32 PM
I don't kow if this qualifies as a leaving rant... I'm trying to figure out what this is all about..you sound as if you think that the users of Poemranker have forced you to alter your writing to a point where you don't enjoy doing it anymore..If thats the way you feel, then I'm not sure hoe it happened.
Re: a comment on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry	15-Dec-05/1:33 PM
Glad to see that you're alive
Re: The Cowardice of Francis Evans by Caducus	15-Dec-05/11:08 AM
cranium in the third stanza just doesn't sound right for me...
Re: Blah Blah by Blindpoetry	15-Dec-05/11:06 AM
now thats creative. writer's block?
Re: a comment on Static by wilco	14-Dec-05/8:59 PM
It's kind of obscure, I know...that's the direction I'm going with my writing right now...just more fun, I think I'm working on the 4th verse...I'll repost this when I get that completely worked out. I'm working on writing my bands debut album and I'm trying to see what works best as lyrics and then use what works the best putting it to music.
Re: Static by wilco	13-Dec-05/6:16 PM
I'd like to get suggestions on the 4th verse..I don't particularly like it as is.
Re: a comment on War (edit) by zodiac	13-Dec-05/4:47 PM
Oh, yes, because everyone in the South is a racist, banjo picking hillbilly.
Re: You Have It Backwards by LilMsLadyPoet	13-Dec-05/4:41 PM
RE: I'm sorry, but when I see the words 'socialism and civic responsibility'...'institutions' that 'collectively' mandate you help a worthless neighbor, that you OWE something to anybody who has his hand out, that your sweat, labour, and reward should be used to raise 'the collective' of people needing your assistance...well...I stop listening. Responsible citizenship, to me, does not mean "responsible to and for the citizens". Exactly what do you think welfare is?
Re: Bri's Room (not done) by Sunshine Conkey	13-Dec-05/4:40 PM
Ok, it's a children's poem...I can get with that...until I saw that comment, I thought you were a retarded.
Re: a comment on Bri's Room (not done) by Sunshine Conkey	13-Dec-05/4:37 PM
Bitches ain't shit but ho's and tricks - Dr. Dre
Re: You Have It Backwards by LilMsLadyPoet	13-Dec-05/4:31 PM
That's a super story and you make some good points. However, you've got a couple of plot holes here. 1) Why was your mother on welfare while getting her Masters? I don't presume to know your family's situation, but why didn't she get a job? 2) You first present the option that people create and invent out of necessity. Then, later, you state that people who "might die tomorrow" won't do that. Do we all not cower under the possibility that we might die tomorrow?
Re: a comment on Bri's Room (not done) by Sunshine Conkey	13-Dec-05/2:34 PM
see..I got paid today and now I can't spell awesome.
Re: a comment on Bri's Room (not done) by Sunshine Conkey	13-Dec-05/2:33 PM
It seems to me that "wealth, money" are more often than not, the cause of amesome stupidity.
Re: Miggy by Everyone	13-Dec-05/2:28 PM
Good lord, man, this must be a dastardly hoax perpetrated by The Man in an attempt to discredit Miggy as a serious poet and songwriter.
Re: I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	13-Dec-05/2:12 PM
It's just that it's really just a letter to some chick..not really a poem.
Re: I saw Your Face Last Night by Dovina	13-Dec-05/1:55 PM
To be honest, I didn't even realize this was you until I went back and looked to see who the writer was. I think you're selling yourself short here. I really thought this was done by one of our kiddieposters (albeit a more advanced one.)