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Static (Lyric) by wilco
On a pub-crawl; Saturday night in a downtown fugue and if we died tonight, we wouldn’t be the only clichés on the six o’ clock news. And the best radio station in town is nothing but static And the heartbreaking hum of the road is soft and erratic. We all explode like ashes out the window of a matchbox car. Take it easy; if the cigarettes burn the exits then we’ll all be brave and fan the flames with new diseases until we change our habits. But I don’t believe in instinct, God I’m just a selfish fuck with a foreign concept in my mind, it’s a firing squad. We all explode like ashes out the window of a matchbox car. And the best radio station in town is nothing but static And the heartbreaking hum of the road is soft and erratic.

Up the ladder: Louwanda
Down the ladder: ode to summer dreams

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5555553
Weighted score: 6.2777777
Overall Rank: 905
Posted: December 13, 2005 6:16 PM PST; Last modified: December 13, 2005 6:16 PM PST
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[n/a] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 13-Dec-05/6:16 PM | Reply
I'd like to get suggestions on the 4th verse..I don't particularly like it as is.
[7] Dovina @ 17.255.240.206 | 13-Dec-05/6:23 PM | Reply
The cigarettes will not likely burn the exits, unless you mean they will burn exits (leave out the "the"). Isn't it too late after exits are burned to change our habits? Maybe, "because we never changed our habits."
[6] nentwined @ 64.60.192.131 | 14-Dec-05/6:29 PM | Reply
Hmm. 4th stanza did jump out as jerky before noticing your comment, but I don't know how to be helpful. I'm really not understanding what's going on.
[n/a] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 > nentwined | 14-Dec-05/8:59 PM | Reply
It's kind of obscure, I know...that's the direction I'm going with my writing right now...just more fun, I think

I'm working on the 4th verse...I'll repost this when I get that completely worked out. I'm working on writing my bands debut album and I'm trying to see what works best as lyrics and then use what works the best putting it to music.
[10] sliver @ 172.199.242.198 | 19-Dec-05/12:33 AM | Reply
I seem to enjoy everything you write. Another10.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 19-Dec-05/7:19 AM | Reply
How'd the ashes get into the matchbox car?
[10] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 | 9-Feb-06/10:00 PM | Reply
This makes me salivate it's so good. I'd like to point out what I really like about this, but it would be every single line. I try very hard not to give out 10s, but this is perfect.

"And the best radio station in town
is nothing but static
And the heartbreaking hum of the road
is soft and erratic."

-genius.
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