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Free verse № 141235

The Right Call

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 21 Mar 2006 · 10 comments

She stood rocking on her feet, hugging herself— the sad look of someone caged, caught in childlike regression. Savage uncertainty. The horrible possibility. The possibly wrong call. Even the right choice could be the wrong call. Harsh paternalism advises: take responsibility, stop being squeamish, ignore seeming randomness. And there she stands, the ultimate arbiter.

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10 comments

[8] wilco 21-Mar-06/7:44 PM Reply
mmmm...okay.
[8] Ranger 22-Mar-06/2:51 AM Reply
Made me think of the 'Genie' case - am I on the right lines?
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 22-Mar-06/10:17 AM Reply
You always make more of me than I am. Thanks.
[9] Caducus 22-Mar-06/8:10 AM Reply
you always find an apt and fittin gend to your work and i like that style about you.

I think the repetition of *the* hurts the poem though
[n/a] Dovina › Caducus 22-Mar-06/10:19 AM Reply
I agree that "the" in the first verse can take a hike. The rest of the the's, however, seem needed in order to be specific.
[9] INTRANSIT 22-Mar-06/9:16 AM Reply
Oh the way kids play adults against one another. Sickos.
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 22-Mar-06/10:22 AM Reply
I always have to read your comments about four times. Even then, it's often a guess. While I see the possibility of this being about a mother being tricked by her kids, I had no such thing in mind. But I rather like being multilingual unknowingly.
[9] ALChemy 22-Mar-06/9:34 AM Reply
Are you a mommy?
I think you'd make a cool mom.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 22-Mar-06/10:23 AM Reply
I think I'd be a cool mom, too. But I'm not one. I'd probably need my kid's guidance and supervision
[9] ALChemy › Dovina 22-Mar-06/5:58 PM Reply
That's why you would be.