Comments byCaducus, 761–780 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on The Abyss of myself by ciantu 26 Nov 2002, 5:57 AM
I've been saying this shit for years.
Every now and then i read something on this site and it restores my faith in the human condition, you sir are ahead of your time with this poem, stanza 2 is right their kicking like a mule. *9*
on What's the Point of Love? by loneshadow29 26 Nov 2002, 5:46 AM
The point of love is the 'falling' as it grounds you.

Love is A heroic loser seeded within the pounding pastures of our crimson core.

(at least you got me inspired)
on Another Chance by Bonehiss 26 Nov 2002, 5:40 AM
I always find it difficult to rate your work as your obviously a hopeless romantic, who writes unchallenging, simple writings. I'm giving you a 6 on this because their is a purity to your work. However I have to criticize you on one aspect and that is the lack of originality in your work, it is a very basic 'greeting card' style with little fibre and alluring qualities.

Fair play to you though, none of us here are Hemingway at the moment, just lose yourself more in your imagination and you'll find more satisfaction in your creativity.
on Maria's ways on how to deal with puberty! by little_angel_maria 26 Nov 2002, 5:20 AM
Buy A Remington
on Maliced flame by T'ien 26 Nov 2002, 4:31 AM
Not a bad 'ad break' read *6*
on Cocky by Goose 26 Nov 2002, 3:55 AM
West Side !
on Liar by Goose 26 Nov 2002, 3:54 AM
This would be better as a Haiku, as it stands its still good but I would be interested to see how much more you could say with less.

Hope I haven't cooked your goose, Mr Goose -7-
on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie 26 Nov 2002, 3:52 AM
So they pissed you off huh?

This IS a confounding and impressive piece, well done -8-
on "My Love" by wickedemon4 26 Nov 2002, 3:48 AM
I wrote something like this once for my girlfriend.

She finished with me and looking back who could blame her?
on Small Town Snow by OneFingerAnswer 25 Nov 2002, 1:42 AM
Some of this was like a drive through Twin Peaks.

A Damn fine cherry pie ma'm -7-
on Wave to the starving children Miss Denmark. by horus8 25 Nov 2002, 1:38 AM
last line says it all !
on Are We Losing Those Things We Hold Dear by abbaslittleclingon 25 Nov 2002, 1:17 AM
You could have carried this on to hit home your message harder. however I liked it, some nice phrases a.l.c
on My world Of Emptiness by abbaslittleclingon 25 Nov 2002, 1:15 AM
not bad, 1st line definitely doesnt sound right, check the grammar ok?
on The Smurf Village by Bachus 23 Nov 2002, 2:02 AM
This is the important one, the sinister paradise of the smurfs, its about to kick off - bigtime in smurfopia
on Beginning or End? by xdarkxangelx24 22 Nov 2002, 9:06 AM
I think its the end !
For your keyboard that is, for Xmas I will buy you an enter button
and a spring
on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit 22 Nov 2002, 9:02 AM
This is really good but its very similar to 'Come Nightime' I think you should remove one and enter one of them later, different beasts with the same growl.
on Come Night time by anitawit 22 Nov 2002, 8:59 AM
You seem to have been inspired and it shows, I was wondering if the little pinpoints of light were the eyes of a dormouse about to be slaughtered in the matrix?
on A load of bollocks - literally!!! by Yardbird 22 Nov 2002, 8:33 AM
at least it wasn't a sock
on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie 22 Nov 2002, 8:05 AM
A powerful statement indeed, its well written and you need to name more specifically those responsible for this atrocity,(e.g the government, the husbands, local authorities, the u.n.) because the subject is sensitive and to some an outsider viewing the insider may provoke racial accusations.

I think however you've researched the facts, the last line could be more affecting, maybe 'Vishnu's Infasdel' would go better for the last line.
Bottom line I liked it, (7)
on Dreaming by TripleHGurl 22 Nov 2002, 6:36 AM
I've been through the clouds too.

thanks to jack daniels