My world Of Emptiness

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Nov 2002 · 3 comments

Yesterday all feeling missing I escaped to a world of emptiness Hidden from vicious creatures hissing A distant chant to the beat of a guess My icy hot chest is more than seared Chanters keep me hostile guest This haunted place holds all I feared The three tongued creature leads the rest This is where my fears are mirrored So unreal to people blessed My eyes are wide with secret tears As I escape to my world of emptiness.

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[5] Caducus 25-Nov-02/1:15 AM Reply

not bad, 1st line definitely doesnt sound right, check the grammar ok?

[n/a] abbaslittleclingon › Caducus 25-Nov-02/1:57 AM Reply

Caducus,
Thanks for the pointers.
abbaslittleclingon

[8] Ranger 25-Nov-02/4:43 AM Reply

I quite like this-it would go well to a Black Sabbath tune (can't remember which one though...) I agree that the first line needs adjusting 8/10