Re: A Well Worth Wait by savannah	22-Nov-02/6:34 AM
Oh dear - you can do better, heart is the right place, but the poems in the wrong place.
Re: When Heaven Is Hell by Brennan	22-Nov-02/6:33 AM
lines 3/4 stanza 2 screw this up, if you took all the best lines and condensed it, it could be quite a good poem. As it stands it dont clog my throat
Re: en el tiempo que era nina by daniella	22-Nov-02/6:29 AM
Spain obviously inspired you, I want to read this in English i feel like I'm drunk in a karaoke bar in benidorm and i'm singing along to something i have no knowledge of, so please re-submit it-
Re: Everyone loves me- not. by UAFANTHORPEY	22-Nov-02/6:25 AM
Giant Haystacks? Big Daddy?
Re: Parking Lot by uncannydanny	22-Nov-02/6:17 AM
its a good yarn but seperate the lines more, this needs to flow clearer, its a stuttered read, otherwise I enjoyed it.
Re: Slow Dance by jdsnyd	22-Nov-02/6:13 AM
this is a seminal piece of work, some wonderfully constructed stanzas and it lifed off right from the start. I want more info on this story i'm at work and cant concentrate please give me the story of this if you can? (i only have chance to read/submit poems at work as i have no computer at home
Re: Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird	22-Nov-02/6:01 AM
How many dicks do you think shes rehearsed with? I reckon she drinks from the furry cup
Re: Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird	22-Nov-02/5:58 AM
even though the sound of it may seem quite atrocious
Re: Held by <~>	22-Nov-02/5:52 AM
whoever rated this a zero really has no fucking taste whoever did it read zzinnia's 'Before Coffee' then take the Greyhound Bus going to Planet Fuckoff
Re: Held by <~>	22-Nov-02/5:50 AM
you make the complex seem clear, and pick the scabs of human suffering like undressing a rose, I learned a lot from this, our styles are similar, yet your more diverse, you have a lot to offer this site.
Re: Missing You by psychedelic	22-Nov-02/5:35 AM
This is beautiful, and the last line is perfection.
Re: Just Die Already... by loneshadow29	22-Nov-02/5:19 AM
Reminded me of Jason Vorhees, I appreciate violence after caffeine.
Re: the devil in you by ciantu	22-Nov-02/4:48 AM
Jim eats in Korean restaurants, atone the bastard after your dog goes for a piss dress it in his underwear while he sleeps, hes just jealous he cant lick his own bollocks and noone else wants too either well done
Re: Not God's Wife, Just a Girl by w~* ATHENA *~w	22-Nov-02/4:43 AM
Loved the last stanza, how can this be criticized i wonder?
Re: Smurfette by Bachus	22-Nov-02/4:06 AM
Was she KGB or CIA? How about the space smurf he was the coolest, you could put that whole x files spin on it?
Re: The Autopsy (as shown on Channel Four) by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:56 AM
trouble is the buckets full of organs. You should be educating yourself on late night channel 5 B movies, you'd see plenty of 'buckets' on that (all botox and no brains)
Re: Goodbye by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:23 AM
fix your 1st line 'must' ok?
Re: Goodbye by Nicholas Jones	22-Nov-02/3:15 AM
As my surnames 'owen' I had to support the welsh half of me. You possess a lot of talent Mr Jones, you illustrate literature in to clarity with your style. Maybe our paths will cross again, I would value your opinions/critique on my work. Are you a wales fan? their playing better than England at the moment at soccer
Re: it was red by kiki	21-Nov-02/10:48 AM
Can't believe this has had shit votes, the voting on here is dody at times to say the least, well kiki your not talking bollocks, this is a deep river and i enjoyed the swim. faaaaaaacking 5 ? have an 8
Re: Faith by INTRANSIT	21-Nov-02/3:48 AM
Made me think about fragility of our physical self, yet you explained phenomenon as a phenomonon and that makes this an intelligent piece - 8 -