Comments byCaducus, 781–800 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on A Well Worth Wait by savannah 22 Nov 2002, 6:34 AM
Oh dear - you can do better,
heart is the right place, but the poems in the wrong place.
on When Heaven Is Hell by Brennan 22 Nov 2002, 6:33 AM
lines 3/4 stanza 2 screw this up, if you took all the best lines and condensed it, it could be quite a good poem. As it stands it dont clog my throat
on en el tiempo que era nina by daniella 22 Nov 2002, 6:29 AM
Spain obviously inspired you, I want to read this in English i feel like I'm drunk in a karaoke bar in benidorm and i'm singing along to something i have no knowledge of, so please re-submit it-
on Everyone loves me- not. by UAFANTHORPEY 22 Nov 2002, 6:25 AM
Giant Haystacks? Big Daddy?
on Parking Lot by uncannydanny 22 Nov 2002, 6:17 AM
its a good yarn but seperate the lines more, this needs to flow clearer, its a stuttered read, otherwise I enjoyed it.

on Slow Dance by jdsnyd 22 Nov 2002, 6:13 AM
this is a seminal piece of work, some wonderfully constructed stanzas and it lifed off right from the start.
I want more info on this story i'm at work and cant concentrate please give me the story of this if you can? (i only have chance to read/submit poems at work as i have no computer at home
on Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird 22 Nov 2002, 6:01 AM
How many dicks do you think shes rehearsed with? I reckon she drinks from the furry cup
on Damn you, Mary Poppins... by Yardbird 22 Nov 2002, 5:58 AM
even though the sound of it may seem quite atrocious
on Held by <~> 22 Nov 2002, 5:52 AM
whoever rated this a zero really has no fucking taste whoever did it read zzinnia's 'Before Coffee' then take the Greyhound Bus going to Planet Fuckoff
on Held by <~> 22 Nov 2002, 5:50 AM
you make the complex seem clear, and pick the scabs of human suffering like undressing a rose, I learned a lot from this, our styles are similar, yet your more diverse, you have a lot to offer this site.
on Missing You by psychedelic 22 Nov 2002, 5:35 AM
This is beautiful, and the last line is perfection.
on Just Die Already... by loneshadow29 22 Nov 2002, 5:19 AM
Reminded me of Jason Vorhees, I appreciate violence after caffeine.
on the devil in you by ciantu 22 Nov 2002, 4:48 AM
Jim eats in Korean restaurants, atone the bastard after your dog goes for a piss dress it in his underwear while he sleeps, hes just jealous he cant lick his own bollocks and noone else wants too either

well done
on Not God's Wife, Just a Girl by w~* ATHENA *~w 22 Nov 2002, 4:43 AM
Loved the last stanza, how can this be criticized i wonder?
on Smurfette by Bachus 22 Nov 2002, 4:06 AM
Was she KGB or CIA?

How about the space smurf he was the coolest, you could put that whole x files spin on it?
on The Autopsy (as shown on Channel Four) by Nicholas Jones 22 Nov 2002, 3:56 AM
trouble is the buckets full of organs. You should be educating yourself on late night channel 5 B movies, you'd see plenty of 'buckets' on that (all botox and no brains)
on Goodbye by Nicholas Jones 22 Nov 2002, 3:23 AM
fix your 1st line 'must' ok?
on Goodbye by Nicholas Jones 22 Nov 2002, 3:15 AM
As my surnames 'owen' I had to support the welsh half of me. You possess a lot of talent Mr Jones, you illustrate literature in to clarity with your style.
Maybe our paths will cross again, I would value your opinions/critique on my work.

Are you a wales fan? their playing better than England at the moment at soccer
on it was red by kiki 21 Nov 2002, 10:48 AM
Can't believe this has had shit votes, the voting on here is dody at times to say the least, well kiki your not talking bollocks, this is a deep river and i enjoyed the swim. faaaaaaacking 5 ?

have an 8
on Faith by INTRANSIT 21 Nov 2002, 3:48 AM
Made me think about fragility of our physical self, yet you explained phenomenon as a phenomonon and that makes this an intelligent piece - 8 -