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A Well Worth Wait (Free verse) by savannah It took so long,
But now we are together and,
I know it will last forever,
Not just a relationship but also a friendship that will grow on forever.
We had such a good friendship,
That I thought it would never become more.
But later on I started to think about you all the time,
And wish that we were more than just friends.
I would imagine you holding me tight,
I could just see you as being Mr. Right,
Telling me everything would be o.k.
And knowing you truly cared.
I told you everything before,
Except that I loved you.
So now that we are finally together,
I???ll start by telling you that???
I love you!!
Up the ladder:
hehehe
Down the ladder:
blockbuster
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Posted: September 9, 2002 3:34 PM PDT; Last modified: September 9, 2002 3:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 3.8965518 Overall Rank: 13440 Comments:
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poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.133
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9-Sep-02/10:48 PM
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Hey you and BARBIE have the same exact ending. And even have ?????????? all over the place. Oh well, can never say it enough: ???????I LOVE YOU TOO?????
that's really neato. aren't we lucky.t
it's a good poem but there are alot of repeated words,like forever,friendship..etc!
i hope it was a double scoop of corned poop. fix your damn conjunctions for the love of jesu. this belongs on a sticky tab in his briefcase. not mocking my lonely masturbatory rituals 'pon my screen. you've crushed my loveless spleen. wench.
the questoion marks have to go, followed by tghe poem. out the window with the lot of it. too goody goody, and mushy without any balance. try tiger milk and some poe.
another sparkler i'm glad you've met that certain someone, and feel refreshed and happy to go forward to a finer day.
Nice and uncomplicated.
its cute .7
good content but could use more of a rythmic feel
I thought you made tons of porn movies and died??? But you really went underground to practice your poetry??
You have even stanzas, but the lines are a bit lenghty. When writing about a such a popular subject it's important to keep your language fresh, avoiding cliches (I know that word is a cliche itself).
It is a very well written poem and also sweet. At parts you flowed very nicely then you broke up. But it was very good.
Really enjoyed that. thanks
Aaaaaaah. I can feel my heart melting. 3. Less of a poem, more a plot line on a crappy, low-budget US sitcom.
Oh dear - you can do better,
heart is the right place, but the poems in the wrong place.
oh please isckly sentimental, burn it adn be done with it, love is the root of unhappiness
nice
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