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Missing You (Haiku) by psychedelic The night sighs your name
The day echoes your laughter
Feelings avalanche.
Up the ladder:
Night Photograph
Down the ladder:
Hippy chic under the bleachers
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Posted: November 20, 2002 9:58 PM PST; Last modified: November 20, 2002 9:58 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.45 Overall Rank: 2913 Comments:
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Caducus @ 62.105.88.10
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22-Nov-02/5:35 AM
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This is beautiful, and the last line is perfection.
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psychedelic @ 202.78.97.15
> Caducus
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24-Nov-02/1:23 AM
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thanks :o)
This is awesome....I write pretty long poems.....but I have never found such feeling,felt such sadness in so few words....Wonderful!!!
get rid of addressing the reader as "you", and escape from the ordinary in line 2.
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