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Held (Free verse) by <~>
Here is a man that I wish would open and find me, a wellspring, standing by kindly laughing at his demise, the Spartan in him melting at my smile disarmed and made wise in letting go of why Holding my hands aside I know better than to try and pry these cracks, Having survived some seismic episodes and swept and mended what was left Broken, torn, bereft but given time, can begin In the dark, when hard is soft and torn is softly assuaged with warmth anew, nothing can be everything between me and you

Up the ladder: The Confession
Down the ladder: Check Yourself

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.375
Weighted score: 5.638736
Overall Rank: 2138
Posted: October 28, 2002 7:28 PM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2002 11:20 AM PST
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Comments:
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 29-Oct-02/1:44 AM | Reply
The last two lines are beautiful. You mould your life into poetry with such precision.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 32.102.20.76 | 29-Oct-02/12:15 PM | Reply
Yes, Quite the teacher this one. Say,zzinnia? Could we revisit my "fire" piece? Theres an important lesson there and I'd kill myself if I missed it.(Not literally) Thanks. 9
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 22-Nov-02/5:50 AM | Reply
you make the complex seem clear, and pick the scabs of human suffering like undressing a rose, I learned a lot from this, our styles are similar, yet your more diverse, you have a lot to offer this site.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 22-Nov-02/5:52 AM | Reply
whoever rated this a zero really has no fucking taste whoever did it read zzinnia's 'Before Coffee' then take the Greyhound Bus going to Planet Fuckoff
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