poemranker ::The Confession by [mojo]

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Free verse № 10409

The Confession

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Aug 2002 · 6 comments

It was about half past four, When they broke down the door, With our legs crossed behind us, We laid on the floor, The day the men in the masks came, The day the men in the masks came. They tied our hands with cable ties, Showed us documents of unspeakable lies, Stuck electrical tape over our crying eyes, They asked if I would sign them, They asked if I would sign them. Then they zipped us into body bags, alive, The men took us out for a little drive, In a damp car boot we took a ride, The men took us to a graveyard, The men took us to a graveyard. With a painful rip they restored my sight, I shielded my eyes from the new dawn light, It was useless, I knew, to put up a fight, More men would always come, More men would always come. I was pushed to the ground on my knees, My eyes a blur, I struggled to see, Then I said, "Oh good God, please", My wife stood in a grave. My wife stood in a grave. I could not live without her, I looked around, I could just see her face, just above ground, She pleaded with her eyes, made no sound, But there was no grave for me, There was no grave for me. They placed a pen in my hand, a gun at her head, Explained how I'd not be harmed when she was dead, She begged them to kill her, I ignored what she said, And I signed my name on the dotted line, I signed my name on the dotted line. [mojo] .....................

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6 comments

[10] <~> 21-Aug-02/1:51 PM Reply
good god mojo! youscare me out of my skin!
[9] razorgrin 21-Aug-02/1:57 PM Reply
that is fucking amazing!
[n/a] [mojo] 21-Aug-02/2:11 PM Reply
Ha ha ha (Evil laugh). Sorry..here.I'll post something lighter.
[n/a] [mojo] 21-Aug-02/2:13 PM Reply
Wow. I'm new...there's a limit. Oh well, I'm on the voting prowl 'till next week.
[8] Shin-Bojangles 21-Aug-02/2:38 PM Reply
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade!
... Either that or move to a deserted island by yourself and live on grass and seabirds far from the horror that is humanity.
[8] Tarquin De La Bog 8-Sep-02/5:09 PM Reply
I have two thoughts about this poem. I began reading, and thought that this was an unbelievable situation described badly. I especially disliked the repetition of the last two lines of the poem; I thought it crass and naff. However, I completely unexpected the twist. The last two stanzas I read with complete interest, and especiallly liked the way the last two lines were similiar, but also differed. I'm convinced. A cracking poem, worthy of an 8.