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Intervention (Lyric) by livingcanvas
If you and yours, by chance of course, would happen not to be, I often wonder to myself 'Could there be room for me?' I love to tell you stories, or lend an open ear, But silence sinks, and again I think, 'Could this be it right here?' You talk of boys who've come and gone and still I am perplexed, By thoughts of me, standing next to thee, asking 'Could I possibly be next?' You fight your battles deep within, I try to lend a hand. More often than not, I fear the thought, 'Could this be where I stand?' If you and yours, by chance of course, would happen not to be, I often wonder to myself 'Could there be room... Would I make room... Is there room for me?'

Up the ladder: Coffle
Down the ladder: The Confession

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.652174
Weighted score: 5.640444
Overall Rank: 2136
Posted: September 18, 2002 3:12 PM PDT; Last modified: September 18, 2002 3:12 PM PDT
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Comments:
[9] Amelia @ 198.146.141.66 | 19-Sep-02/8:16 AM | Reply
I'm already forming a tune...:)
[8] deleted user @ 64.12.96.46 | 18-Nov-02/10:09 PM | Reply
still my favorite
[9] deleted user @ 12.229.194.97 | 24-Dec-02/6:32 PM | Reply
so who is she???
[8] deleted user @ 205.188.208.106 | 25-Dec-02/11:49 PM | Reply
"she" is me
[10] Another Bobjim?!?! @ 81.132.42.59 | 31-Dec-02/8:29 PM | Reply
Beautiful. No, really. Brings up so many memories. Damn, now I'm all upset. Have 10, you depressing bugger.
[n/a] Ranger @ 212.67.101.122 | 1-Jan-03/11:26 AM | Reply
Ha ha ha
[n/a] Ranger @ 212.67.101.122 | 1-Jan-03/11:27 AM | Reply
Ever listen to Counting Crows?
[7] Spindle @ 68.83.2.194 | 10-May-04/4:14 PM | Reply
asking 'Could I possibly be next?'
This sounds rather choppy. You may want to work on your rhyme scheme. All in all I liked it
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