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Lyric № 15874

Intervention

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Sep 2002 · 8 comments

If you and yours, by chance of course, would happen not to be, I often wonder to myself 'Could there be room for me?' I love to tell you stories, or lend an open ear, But silence sinks, and again I think, 'Could this be it right here?' You talk of boys who've come and gone and still I am perplexed, By thoughts of me, standing next to thee, asking 'Could I possibly be next?' You fight your battles deep within, I try to lend a hand. More often than not, I fear the thought, 'Could this be where I stand?' If you and yours, by chance of course, would happen not to be, I often wonder to myself 'Could there be room... Would I make room... Is there room for me?'

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8 comments

[9] Amelia 19-Sep-02/8:16 AM Reply
I'm already forming a tune...:)
[8] deleted user 18-Nov-02/10:09 PM Reply
still my favorite
[9] deleted user 24-Dec-02/6:32 PM Reply
so who is she???
[8] deleted user 25-Dec-02/11:49 PM Reply
"she" is me
[10] Another Bobjim?!?! 31-Dec-02/8:29 PM Reply
Beautiful. No, really. Brings up so many memories. Damn, now I'm all upset. Have 10, you depressing bugger.
[n/a] Ranger 1-Jan-03/11:26 AM Reply
Ha ha ha
[n/a] Ranger 1-Jan-03/11:27 AM Reply
Ever listen to Counting Crows?
[7] Spindle 10-May-04/4:14 PM Reply
asking 'Could I possibly be next?'
This sounds rather choppy. You may want to work on your rhyme scheme. All in all I liked it