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Maliced flame (Lyric) by T'ien clawed between your driven charm
with scratches upon my face
sliced within your placid calm
and drowned beneath the race
preserved amoungst your soliced beuaty
just beyond my reach
the candle slips askew lifeless skin
searing the ash'ed flesh
til burning the tendered bone within
all that will be left a cindered mesh
Up the ladder:
Forbidden fruit
Down the ladder:
if she only knew
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Posted: November 25, 2002 2:44 PM PST; Last modified: January 8, 2003 6:37 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.654218 Overall Rank: 12285 Comments:
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Bachus @ 24.126.113.154
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25-Nov-02/7:58 PM
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was it reall neccesary to go with that name. it makes it completely impossible to take anything you write seriously or give a shit. that's why i don't.0.
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T'ien @ 212.219.142.161
> Bachus
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26-Nov-02/3:13 AM
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to tell u the truth i had no clue wot to name it so i came up wit wot first popped into me head
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
> T'ien
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26-Nov-02/4:49 AM
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TELL US THE TRUTH OR POETIE WILL BE CONTACTING THE FBI.
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T'ien @ 212.219.142.161
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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26-Nov-02/7:19 AM
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hhmm lol from the critics i must reason that this is not my best work :) ah well i like it and it occupied me for half an hour
Actually, considering the state of mind he's in right now, I think it sums up everything pretty well.
It needs a bit of work, but hey, so does almost everything
Not a bad 'ad break' read *6*
Your a nutter, nice title !
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thanks im glad u think the re-do is better
And you are sending this off to Slayer tomorrow morning. What crap. The British are coming, the British are cuming. I h8 ur shit cuz it is jus realeee bad.
Is that Brit shit, or just Lark Angel?
SORRY BOWY I JUST DONT UNDERSTAND THOSE LONG WORDS LIKE THE AND AND
Yes, incest is truely terrible, eh?
Mikey, hand me that head and put all your hands, arms and flippers in the air
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