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if she only knew (Free verse) by ChunkyHunkyMonkey
I wonder if she ever knew i loved her? For every little thing i did to her it didnt matter. I was a fool for ever thinking she was the perfect girl I did everything, I was the typical Prince Charming But to her i was only a plaything I wish i never left her side for I loved her dearly I loved her I alwayz did But for everytime i said I Love You she would say Ditto I wished she would have cared more as I did for her She was my true Angel but later i realized she was my little devil After a while she lost interest and it hurt I asked myself why me why did she leave me? Was it because i didnt love her was it because i didnt care no, it was because she lost faith in me My love was true and strong but hers was just a playful way of saying hi, but that doesn't matter I will go on and live my life the way it should be happy and very enjoyablle She is now a mere thought of the past But one thing remains she will be my first Sweetheart

Up the ladder: Maliced flame
Down the ladder: Where The Fuck Is Saddam?

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.7142856
Weighted score: 4.654218
Overall Rank: 12281
Posted: January 2, 2003 5:41 PM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2003 5:41 PM PST
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[7] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 | 2-Jan-03/5:45 PM | Reply
wholly shit I hope it's not me. I can't bear to cause ppl pain
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.35.154.196 > Freethinker1602 | 2-Jan-03/5:56 PM | Reply
What if the people to whom you are causing pain, are themselves causing even more people even more pain? Could you bear to cause them pain? Or would you walk by on the other side while nudeful children cried? Cross over the road my friend! Ask the Lord His strength to lend! His compassion has no end! Cross over the road.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 2-Jan-03/8:24 PM | Reply
i gave sally struthers my old pair of hooves cause i got new ones for christmas, she's saddled and ready to go (she ate all of my prunes and dates) we're crossing the road currently, see you there.n
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.35.154.196 | 2-Jan-03/5:49 PM | Reply
Hilarious!
[9] Another Bobjim?!?! @ 81.132.42.59 | 2-Jan-03/5:50 PM | Reply
Ouch. Been there, done that, got the postcard. 9. Bah, I'm upset again now.
[8] wOrnella Mutiw @ 198.81.26.167 | 2-Jan-03/6:05 PM | Reply
Ahhhhhh...it's me...well not really. Now I must go on a blind date with a writer/skateboarder from Culver City.....ahhhhhhh.....what should I wear????...who cares.
[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 10-Jan-03/2:11 AM | Reply
I wouldn't say this is particularly poignant or heart wrenching but its faily well told and from the heart so a worthy 7, i too have written of loss (a lot)
[n/a] scitz @ 62.105.88.10 | 10-Jan-03/2:17 AM | Reply
Quite sweet, a good effort much better than celebrating yourself here is a 7
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