Re: WASTED by titan69	16-Nov-03/7:18 AM
kindof a enviro-political pimple. Reach a bit for those expressions, seek specificity like the good ones in that third line ("wind" could be better served though). -7- as an aside - most people worry more about the second and third world folks than we who are hindered by bureacracy.
Re: Zinnias are a funny flower by Bachus	16-Nov-03/7:15 AM
I think with some line breaks, and a little more fleshing out of this balcony character this could be more interesting. A peppering of well put sentiments would be well served by some structure. -8- ? wish there was a 7.5
Re: My daddy taught me about being a good sport by horus8	16-Nov-03/7:12 AM
hey - that's actually a good sentiment, and well said. -8-
Re: This Stinks by smarmyfaurt	16-Nov-03/7:08 AM
tickles? -4-
Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass	16-Nov-03/7:00 AM
a pretty good, if done, image. This kindof thing comes pretty easy to most people, even non-poets -5-
Re: hello eternity by justjay	16-Nov-03/6:57 AM
Not too bad, I think the "then" in stanza three wants to be a "than" -7-
Re: This is Bad by newagepoet2000	16-Nov-03/6:54 AM
LoL - actually, this is wicked funny. A potential classic. -9-
Re: a comment on Reflection by Judas kiss	16-Nov-03/5:29 AM
You did?? That is *so* sweet! No one has ever done that for me before, well - except for you and Mr. Angel. I can't wait to read it - *you*, my dear friend - are *such* a love.
Re: Preacher Man by masticatedmess	15-Nov-03/4:19 PM
too easy, this one. And you should not masticate, it is against God's law, and you will be blinded. blessed with a 1.
Re: Thong Thoo by fatmansinging	15-Nov-03/4:18 PM
why you make me read this? huh? is is kinda catchy though... so, I think that, and the fact it is made up entirely of words that, I figure, are of your own construction - brings it up to a: -1-
Re: Don't Look At Me! by assisenormus	15-Nov-03/4:15 PM
a poem per user name, one way to do it. this is cute. -7-
Re: The Poemranker Poe-lease by Jeremi B. Handrinos	15-Nov-03/3:21 PM
oh christ, not more. Can't you write about anything else other than how you've been wronged by the nefarious poemranker characters? -0-
Re: Breakfast by flouredweevle	15-Nov-03/1:16 PM
welcome to the USSR, comrade. This would make a good Senryu. -7- for what could have been.
Re: A Coven of Toes by sixtoedwonder	15-Nov-03/1:14 PM
Love the title. Love the ditty - make a me laugh, yes, it did. have an -8-
Re: a comment on Reflection by Judas kiss	15-Nov-03/10:51 AM
glad for the fix - but is it right now as stands? "...lips which lift my down when we kiss." ? As in the down of a goose?
Re: Sagittarius by INTRANSIT	15-Nov-03/10:48 AM
Roger that; nicely done. -9-
Re: a comment on Reflection by Judas kiss	15-Nov-03/7:36 AM
Special Abilities: Detect Thoughts (Su): A doppelganger can continuously detect thoughts as the spell cast by an 18th-level sorcerer (save DC 13). It can suppress or resume this ability as a free action. If it can read an opponent's mind, a doppelganger gets a +4 circumstance bonus to Bluff and Disguise checks Special Qualities: Alter Self (Su): A doppelganger can assume the shape of any Small or Medium-size humanoid. This works like alter self as cast by an 18th-level sorcerer, but the doppelganger can remain in the chosen form indefinitely. It can assume a new form or return to its own as a standard action. While using alter self, a doppelganger gets a +10 circumstance bonus to Disguise checks. Immunities (Ex): Doppelgangers are immune to sleep and charm effects. or I recommend: The Complete Guide to Dopplegangers "The Complete Guide to Doppelgangers is a stand-alone, world-neutral sourcebook covering everything you ever wanted to know about doppelgangers. As a GM, you'll learn how to run doppelgangers -- both in combat and role-playing situations. And since every Complete Guide includes guidelines on playing the monster as a character race, players have new options, too. The Complete Guide to Doppelgangers features: The true origin of these bizarre creatures. Background on doppelganger social structure, including their various life stages and details on how they have penetrated human and demi-human society. Unique campaign ideas and adventure hooks centered around doppelgangers. New monster stats for intriguing variations on the standard doppelganger. "
Re: a comment on Reflection by Judas kiss	15-Nov-03/7:28 AM
I think what he means that there are more definitions, let me help with *actually providing information*: Meaning "double walker" a doppelganger is a shadow-self that accompanies every human. Only the owner of a doppelganger can see it, otherwise it is invisible to human eyes. Dogs and cats have been known to see doppelgangers. Providing sympathetic company, a doppelganger almost always stands behind a person, and they cast no reflection in a mirror. They are prepared to listen and give advice to humans, either implanting ideas in their heads, or a sort of osmosis. It is said to be bad luck if it is seen, and rarely a doppelganger will make itself visible to friends or family, often causing great confusion. Doppelgangers can be mischievous and malicious. or the literal german translation is "double goer" or As used in various role playing games - like DUNGEONS and DRAGONS (tm) - is that better, dik?
Re: Gen. Rockman & his dirt encrusted clicker brigade by Y2kSlamPoet	15-Nov-03/7:21 AM
Would probably be good as a performance piece. I imagine an enraged 14 year old, resplendent in his street creds and hard won disrespect for the "man" and how society is oppressing him and his "posse" of "homies", a few gold chains and base-ball cap doing that arm crossing thing that was popular in the early 90's. Yo yo you – Maybe spice it up with some “izza”’s at the end of a few sentences. yeah, that would be dope. Do it. -5- (same shit, different day)
Re: a comment on Reflection by Judas kiss	15-Nov-03/1:14 AM
A ghostly double of a living person, especially one that haunts its fleshly counterpart. http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=doppelganger