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Preacher Man (Free verse) by masticatedmess
He stood at the corner screeching As I juggled my bags of cans. He said that I was going to hell. He said Jesus was his man. I gave my tobacco one last chew, Swallowed the spit as I always do, Took the used up wad in hand, And flung the masticated mess at him.

Down the ladder: sick and demented

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.44
Weighted score: 3.4400036
Overall Rank: 13612
Posted: November 15, 2003 3:25 PM PST; Last modified: November 15, 2003 3:25 PM PST
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Comments:
[1] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 15-Nov-03/4:19 PM | Reply
too easy, this one. And you should not masticate, it is against God's law, and you will be blinded.

blessed with a 1.
[4] savagelymakeitcount @ 220.220.62.219 | 15-Nov-03/7:07 PM | Reply
Man, your horrible.
The last line doesn't go.
What is it with you and masticated?
[n/a] LuV_jOhNnY @ 198.108.232.52 | 9-Jan-04/9:06 PM | Reply
sick.
Masticated(hehehe inside joke with friends, quite dirty one at that)
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 212.219.223.8 > LuV_jOhNnY | 1-Jun-04/2:53 AM | Reply
It's not an "inside joke". It's an extremely common, obvious and tedious piece of wordplay.
[n/a] the codeine kid @ 217.159.74.253 | 31-May-04/12:11 PM | Reply
this is good man. s'like something nick cave would pass off as writing in "and the ass saw the angel"...nick cave meets flannery o connor under the shadow of the peyote. good stuff
[1] TwilightDawned @ 24.69.255.205 | 10-Jul-04/12:00 PM | Reply
You had some rhyme scheme..untill the last part.
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