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Zinnias are a funny flower (Free verse) by Bachus
I've never trusted women. I've never cared much for flowers. I'm a young man working the balcony. I hate using the word "I" in poetry. Especially, when I'm talking about you. I've never done anything to hurt you? In fact, I've let you weave your lies and play the part. I even put you at the center of the table, but I've never trusted women. I've never cared for you, and you don't trust me, because I don't respond to the whistle of your stamen, or the pollen rubbed by your insects. You are a flower, colored, fragrant, watered. I am a boy that works the balcony, and that's just the way it is. I am just a boy, but you... You belong over there with them, and I won't miss you much. Because, I never really knew you much. And after today, I don't want too. I'm glad you're an annual. Predictably right on time. But I don't care for flowers. A Tombstone is my lonely charm. I'm a Tennessee William's "One Arm". I am a boy that works the balcony. Nothing more, and nothing less. And you were just a series of flowers between a cheap trick, a stale cigarette, and an over priced martini.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0172415
Weighted score: 7.017241
Overall Rank: 63
Posted: November 16, 2003 12:25 AM PST; Last modified: November 16, 2003 12:25 AM PST
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Comments:
[9] richa @ 81.178.246.4 | 16-Nov-03/4:43 AM | Reply
like it was written in my soul
[8] ShaNoN+960317485 @ 199.40.206.3 > richa | 16-Nov-03/6:23 AM | Reply
i thought u had none;souls baby:o)
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 16-Nov-03/7:15 AM | Reply
I think with some line breaks, and a little more fleshing out of this balcony character this could be more interesting.

A peppering of well put sentiments would be well served by some structure.

-8- ? wish there was a 7.5
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > Shuushin | 16-Nov-03/2:33 PM | Reply
I don't have to focus on an object I know like the back of my hand. Would you like to know about the balcony boys like the back of my hand too? Because, I'm currently writing one.
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Bachus | 16-Nov-03/3:01 PM | Reply
Sure, fire away.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.72 | 16-Nov-03/10:01 AM | Reply
This is exactly why we like zinnias. they are a hearty flower that can survive winters. And they return to grace us with their beauty every spring. A tree does not hibernate. It improves its root structure during the down season. Just focus on your balcony. All is well in nature.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > INTRANSIT | 16-Nov-03/2:31 PM | Reply
"I've never trusted women.
I've never cared much for flowers.
I'm a young man working the balcony."
[4] Shade_dreamer @ 64.105.60.13 | 16-Jan-04/7:09 AM | Reply
Sorry mate. I jt dont get it.
[n/a] annabellee @ 64.252.105.83 > Shade_dreamer | 30-Jan-04/8:45 PM | Reply
I get it and like it. 9
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > Shade_dreamer | 7-May-04/2:45 PM | Reply
just a guess, maybe, but my user name used to be zzinnia.
[7] unouluvme @ 66.167.223.251 | 2-Apr-04/4:02 PM | Reply
okay
[2] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.255.83 | 26-Aug-06/4:40 PM | Reply
Enchanting
[0] mr cunt @ 85.210.204.236 | 2-Mar-07/6:02 PM | Reply
Drivel. But more than that. Illiterate drivel. Pathetic horseturds.
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