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Free verse № 75568

Zinnias are a funny flower

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Nov 2003 · 13 comments

I've never trusted women. I've never cared much for flowers. I'm a young man working the balcony. I hate using the word "I" in poetry. Especially, when I'm talking about you. I've never done anything to hurt you? In fact, I've let you weave your lies and play the part. I even put you at the center of the table, but I've never trusted women. I've never cared for you, and you don't trust me, because I don't respond to the whistle of your stamen, or the pollen rubbed by your insects. You are a flower, colored, fragrant, watered. I am a boy that works the balcony, and that's just the way it is. I am just a boy, but you... You belong over there with them, and I won't miss you much. Because, I never really knew you much. And after today, I don't want too. I'm glad you're an annual. Predictably right on time. But I don't care for flowers. A Tombstone is my lonely charm. I'm a Tennessee William's "One Arm". I am a boy that works the balcony. Nothing more, and nothing less. And you were just a series of flowers between a cheap trick, a stale cigarette, and an over priced martini.

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13 comments

[9] richa 16-Nov-03/4:43 AM Reply
like it was written in my soul
[8] ShaNoN+960317485 › richa 16-Nov-03/6:23 AM Reply
i thought u had none;souls baby:o)
[8] Shuushin 16-Nov-03/7:15 AM Reply
I think with some line breaks, and a little more fleshing out of this balcony character this could be more interesting.

A peppering of well put sentiments would be well served by some structure.

-8- ? wish there was a 7.5
[n/a] Bachus › Shuushin 16-Nov-03/2:33 PM Reply
I don't have to focus on an object I know like the back of my hand. Would you like to know about the balcony boys like the back of my hand too? Because, I'm currently writing one.
[8] Shuushin › Bachus 16-Nov-03/3:01 PM Reply
Sure, fire away.
[10] INTRANSIT 16-Nov-03/10:01 AM Reply
This is exactly why we like zinnias. they are a hearty flower that can survive winters. And they return to grace us with their beauty every spring. A tree does not hibernate. It improves its root structure during the down season. Just focus on your balcony. All is well in nature.
[n/a] Bachus › INTRANSIT 16-Nov-03/2:31 PM Reply
"I've never trusted women.
I've never cared much for flowers.
I'm a young man working the balcony."
[4] Shade_dreamer 16-Jan-04/7:09 AM Reply
Sorry mate. I jt dont get it.
[n/a] annabellee › Shade_dreamer 30-Jan-04/8:45 PM Reply
I get it and like it. 9
[n/a] <~> › Shade_dreamer 7-May-04/2:45 PM Reply
just a guess, maybe, but my user name used to be zzinnia.
[7] unouluvme 2-Apr-04/4:02 PM Reply
okay
[2] Edna Sweetlove 26-Aug-06/4:40 PM Reply
Enchanting
[0] mr cunt 2-Mar-07/6:02 PM Reply
Drivel. But more than that. Illiterate drivel. Pathetic horseturds.