| Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik |
20-Aug-03/1:09 PM |
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I love this. It's disgusting and beautiful at the same time. Like life.
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20-Aug-03/1:11 PM |
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| Re: Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme |
20-Aug-03/1:21 PM |
I like it. Picturesque like pork loins being salted on your mobile patio.
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| Re: Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik |
20-Aug-03/1:29 PM |
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I like this one. The point is clear, the rthym fluid, and your personality shows through. Smart.
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| Re: Those Crazy's people in my brainsky by Shardik |
20-Aug-03/1:41 PM |
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| Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined |
20-Aug-03/1:45 PM |
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I liked the first three paragraphs. The fourth one broke apart, I think. Maybe massage the second and forth line in the last paragraph?
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| Re: (The vinyards of Tuscany) by Patsy |
20-Aug-03/1:47 PM |
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| Re: i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america |
20-Aug-03/1:49 PM |
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wow. A man of words I am, but I only have one for you. Wow.
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| Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined |
20-Aug-03/1:52 PM |
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Awesome. Just freaking Awesome.
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| Re: Eternity by Jigg |
20-Aug-03/1:54 PM |
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20-Aug-03/1:55 PM |
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Was this inspired by craigslist? hehe, I like it.
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20-Aug-03/2:45 PM |
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| Re: The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
20-Aug-03/2:48 PM |
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haha, I like the second verse. I like both, but the second best.
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2-Sep-03/3:43 PM |
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OMG martyr and you have worked harder. I didn't even read beyond that.
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| Re: great caesar's ghost by bondjedi |
2-Sep-03/3:47 PM |
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redundancy to fit in the framework of a haiku. I don't like it.
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| Re: Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe |
2-Sep-03/3:48 PM |
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| Re: Mississipi Murder by scitz |
2-Sep-03/3:50 PM |
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Kind of good, kind of hard to read. I think you could revise this to something much better. Some of the ryme works and some of it is very hard to read. Good work for a first draft.
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| Re: The empty room by INTRANSIT |
2-Sep-03/3:50 PM |
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| Re: Summer by MaliqaTara |
2-Sep-03/3:53 PM |
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I almost wanted to stop half way through and call it cliche' but I read on and the ending closed it just fine. I still think there are a lot of cliche' references, but it has feeling, which is more important the mechanics anyway.
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| Re: As the Redwood Ages by DurtKL |
2-Sep-03/3:55 PM |
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