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Iterated Fuck (Free verse) by nentwined
sex slippery glisten vagina welcome penis slurp caress and slide and squeeze, pulse and pulse and pulse and cum; pulse and pulse and deeper thrust and deeper thrust and pulse and pulse and grope and squeeze and kiss and hold and thrust and thrust. juices ooze. sweat glistens, skin caresses, throbs: heat and shivers. bodies cool and dry and separate held tight and slowly move again: warmth grows and pressure builds and slip slides ridged insides. pain and numbness court pleasure, sensory overload mocks desire; perseverance pounds and pounds and cums again. parts relax with gentle hip rocking: slowly, slowly. used wetness drips as body breaths find sympathetic pitter patter. vagina tugs on penis tugs on labia fights for one. last. fling. separation, hugs and cuddling, sweet nothings and nasty somethings bantered lazily about; fade to well-earned contentment. lips and tongue, then lazy, then not, rewaking once more the well-oiled machines and thrusting and sucking and pounding and rounding, smoothing and sanding and knocking and squeezing and thrusting and thrusting and rubbing and rubbing and slurping and flicking and pounding and choking and soft gentle tugs then hard urgent tugs then rhythmic the beat and the beat and the beat and the wet glistening sliding and inning and outing and all over the bouting and banging and banging and banging and banging and banging and banging and banging and banging -- and CUM. hand grasps the penis and deftly rehardens and urges toward exit most quiveringly clean. then hands grasp the breasts and hip rocking motion, careful at first in the smooth tunnel of worm, then faster and harder and harder and faster and hands are breast-kneading, waist-grasping, clit-feeding; frenzy pounding most urgent needs one more last climax, so distant yet promised, slowly slides near. heart pounding cock knocking breath shaking blood straining to transport more air for explosions: jaw set, rocky cock rocking in out in out in out in out IN OUT IN OUT IN OUT IN OUT... mind fading, breath held, lightheaded and dizzy and POUNDING and POUNDING and GROPING and KNEADING and FINDING the RHYTHM her BREATHING is CLOSER and CLOSER and CLOSER and CLOSER and one last is won and the two then collapse in post-postcoital bliss and the dreams that come haunt them are wonderous indeed.

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Weighted score: 7.078691
Overall Rank: 18
Posted: February 18, 2003 9:01 PM PST; Last modified: February 18, 2003 9:01 PM PST
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

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[6] <~> @ 67.84.174.185 | 18-Feb-03/9:23 PM | Reply
shit. i'll say. wow. that's a departure for you. a relase. or two. or 3. yessir. yes indeedy. needy.

i just wished you had eased me into it more with some foreplay, instead of thrusting deftly from the outset.


[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > <~> | 19-Feb-03/10:03 AM | Reply
:heh: I was at a cafe and had no release simply available. I was far past the point of foreplay (things had been burning in the back of my mind all day). though mayhaps in an iteration of the poem some can be added.
[7] TanHand @ 67.30.186.111 | 18-Feb-03/9:45 PM | Reply
How dare you use that language on poemranker. 7.
[5] Mr Pig @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Feb-03/5:05 AM | Reply
I say Sir, one may say this is an intersting read but the profane manner in which our most personal anatomical parts are described is awful, please stop watching hotel porn, My offer is a 5 marks lost on degrading penis
[0] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Feb-03/11:30 AM | Reply
Best thing you've written in 6 months, and people wonder why i tear the shit out of pseudo poetry? obviously because it's the opposite of this... GQT AWARDE! 10
[7] hipster flare @ 209.68.66.203 | 3-Mar-03/7:44 AM | Reply
all righty then.
[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 27-Mar-03/5:15 PM | Reply
Ewww... I never I should have quit reading after the sex but no I thought there will be more sex and then I was like sweet a blow job but then Curiousity got the best of me Anal Ewww... this would be a 60 rounded down to 10 cause there is nothing higher than a 10 but you just lost 51 points for anal enjoy your 9
Your right. I was just looking at Exit most quiveringly Clean, and the Tunnel of Worm. I'm used to calling my bum an exit only and Do Not Enter. The Tunnel of Worm <-combined with the exit remark, Tape worms being defecated, and the fact that your fecal matter slowly crawls thru your body like a worm. I comepletely missed clit-feeding. My mistake.
How do you know? Make your eyes look at this:

First, 'exit' seems clearly to refer to the anus. The vagina is almost never described as an exit except during childbirth, while the anus just is an exit. Second, that that the 'exit' is clean is worth mentioning indicates that it would normally or otherwise be unclean, which is obviously more true of the anus. Third, that he mentions being careful indicates the increased likelihood of injury during anal sex. Fourth, the anus is more likely to 'quiver', given that it is a sphincter. Fifth, whatever foul meaning 'tunnel of worm' has, for reasons pinkbunnyofdoom has mentioned it seems more likely to be about the anus. What possible meaning could it have of any other kind fo sex?

Sixth, think of the logistics. If "hands are breast-kneading, waist-grasping, clit-feeding", then surely he is taking the MYSTERY SEX PARTICIPANT from behind. Finally, although this is highly conjectural, I believe "straining to transport more air for explosions" refers to a bizarre sex practice of nentwined whereby his anally-obtained climax is heightened by the penetratee farting on his love-truncheone at the critical moment. This would also explain "lightheaded and dizzy", as one is apt to become so after a particularly powerful farte.

How is it, then, that the passage refers to non-anal sex?

ARE YOU, <~>, HAVING THE SEX WITH NENTWINED?!?!!!111/1/?
[6] <~> @ 64.252.90.210 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/4:44 PM | Reply
<wimper> i was in an harness. <sniff> and, his penis is truly 3000 miles long. <blurt> HOW WAS I TO SEE IT COMING, CLEAR ACROSS THE ROCKIES? THE PURPLE MOUNTAINS MAJESTY, THE AMBER FIELDS OF GRAIN???

DAMN YOU!!! DAMN YOU FOR EXPOSING MY SHAME!!!

grima wormtunnel. that's who you are. vest or no, there is truly poison in your ear.
[10] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > <~> | 4-Jun-03/4:48 PM | Reply
I woke up everyone in the house while laughing uncontrollably at your post. God bless you, Mr. <~>!
[6] <~> @ 64.252.90.210 > Bill Z Bub | 4-Jun-03/4:58 PM | Reply
no no no, bless you, Ms. Bub

xo,

z
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > <~> | 4-Jun-03/4:49 PM | Reply
Shameless plug



ttp://www.garageband.com/genre/raprock

if you scroll to the bottom you'll find me blowing darkangel at the bottom of the page.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > Bachus | 4-Jun-03/5:04 PM | Reply
Quite good. I fail to understand how you can have any kind of coherent "rap/rock" category. Even having "rock" is like having a "music" category.

Congratulations on being #32/36, by the way. Only 31 more steps to the top!!1
[0] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/6:13 PM | Reply
Glad to see your soul is still mia.
[3] suckmychucks @ 64.41.24.252 | 9-Apr-03/1:19 PM | Reply
you cock knocking fag! i give you a 3 for soiling my pants.
[n/a] nolan @ 65.93.27.96 | 3-May-03/10:23 PM | Reply
sick mind dude... -3
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 2-Jun-03/4:40 PM | Reply
Whatever erotic energy you might have built up in the second verse is utterly destroyed by the fact that the last word is "CUM".
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.213.23 | 4-Jun-03/12:45 PM | Reply
After discovering the audiostatic recordings of poemes on your website, I was disappointed to find that 'Iterated Fuck' was not among them. How dearly I would love to hear this read out in nentwined's sumptuous, erotic tones!

Alas, I could not wait. Here is a recording I have made which represents, I believe, what it would sound like.

http://darkangel.illfuckinghostit.com/bumwagon.html
[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/2:52 PM | Reply
that was both well read and hilarious. Thank you. :)
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 > nentwined | 4-Jun-03/2:53 PM | Reply
but was it erotic? that's the important thing...
[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/2:54 PM | Reply
possibly for someone.

I think I did catch some points where I need to tighten the poem, after your reading. I'll have to listen to it a few times. :)
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 > nentwined | 4-Jun-03/2:59 PM | Reply
whatever you do, i'd leave in the "hand grasps the penis" bit and the banging and banging and bonking and bonking and banging and bonking and banging and banging and banging and baaaaaaarrrgghhh!!!

Actually that's not a bad idea. You might want to throw in an "AAAAAAAAAARRGGHHHH!" somewhere. Instead of CUM.
[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/3:06 PM | Reply
:heheh: I'll consider it. And I've not listened to it again, yet, but I *think* you missed one of the "banging"s. ;) Maybe it was a silent "Aaaaaaaaaaaargh!".
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.213.23 > nentwined | 4-Jun-03/4:12 PM | Reply
You're right. I... I... I don't know what to say. How can I ever be redeemed!? I must proceed at once to strap myself into Mr Chetwoad's Flagellating Contraption to atone for my sins.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/4:20 PM | Reply
About as erotic as watching a guerilla witha phd trunk rape a minivan.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/3:04 PM | Reply
My son was just dancing around the computer to this you sick bastards. lol.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.213.23 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 4-Jun-03/4:17 PM | Reply
Wait, you still have a son? I thought maybe he'd been lost in the confusion surrounding the Philp symour Hoffemane... 'unpleasantness'.

Which is the primary source of your income, the buggery for money or the hard-hitting street poetry?
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/4:18 PM | Reply
Buggery, how would he have been lost?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/3:04 PM | Reply
You read it twice through correct?
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.213.23 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 4-Jun-03/3:59 PM | Reply
No. You had it on repeat.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Jun-03/4:22 PM | Reply
Oh...Yeah huh.
[10] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 4-Jun-03/4:44 PM | Reply
a breath of fresh air. No wait, it smells like FUCKING in here you perverted little weasel! 9.9
[7] daniella @ 200.68.202.74 | 4-Jun-03/10:45 PM | Reply
did you use a dictaphone for this baby?
[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > daniella | 4-Jun-03/10:57 PM | Reply
nope. wrote it all by hand. perseverence. ;)
[3] david @ 66.183.25.241 | 4-Jul-03/10:06 PM | Reply
Not tonight, nentwined. I have a headache.
[10] deleted user @ 12.219.155.182 | 5-Jul-03/12:35 PM | Reply
Wow. Let's see we got onomatopoeia going strong, you keep my attention for sure, and you actually made my clit hard. Good write!
[0] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > deleted user | 5-Jul-03/1:38 PM | Reply
Good God. Did you really need to say that while I was eating my lunch?
[n/a] King Abdullah II @ 195.157.153.253 | 10-Jul-03/10:43 AM | Reply
Ace
[4] Settle @ 67.75.22.253 | 20-Aug-03/6:24 AM | Reply
gross. where's the love.
[10] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 | 20-Aug-03/1:52 PM | Reply
Awesome. Just freaking Awesome.
[7] Tintagiles @ 198.164.201.42 | 4-Sep-03/5:17 PM | Reply
I'd like it a hell of a lot more if the word 'Cum' never appeared. 'Come' I might forgive, but never 'cum'.
[n/a] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > Tintagiles | 4-Sep-03/5:20 PM | Reply
I was torn on that. I couldn't decide whether 'come' was actually 'valid', or if it was only, properly, 'cum'. Finally (as you can see) just went with the word I was sure of.
[7] Tintagiles @ 207.179.148.76 > nentwined | 4-Sep-03/5:48 PM | Reply
Well, I know 'come' has been used thus spelt, but then it just seems silly, because the immediate reaction is 'What the devil is that verb doing there as a noun??? Oh, wait a minute... considering the context... oh, I get it.' 'Cum', on the other hand, just reeks of really bad porn.

The last line's quite good, by the way -- the dream bit, that is.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 82.39.21.58 | 28-Apr-05/2:39 PM | Reply
I just want to reiterate my total, total horror at this poeme. I've seen so many unbelievably sick things on the internet that I don't understand how I can feel so morally violated by what is, when you get down to it, a description of ordinary, unkinky, consensual sex between consenting adults.

I think it's because I keep imagining Rockmage peeping out from a closet to watch, his beard all a-quiver.

-10-
[n/a] nentwined @ 64.60.192.130 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 28-Apr-05/2:40 PM | Reply
Your rendition of this continues to haunt me.
[10] Edna Sweetlove @ 127.0.0.1 | 15-Feb-21/9:47 AM | Reply
A filthy stream of consciousness!
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