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Free verse № 42833

As the Redwood Ages

by DurtKL

Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Mar 2003 · Edited 7 Mar 2003 · 8 comments

I, the dead man sleepwalking, Grindin through mugs of Folger's, While Poppin No-Doz as my fingers tremble. Eyes pulse to the beat Of books, thicker than the Torah, Dancing the tango with the Hardy - Weinberg theorem. Watson and Crick, The ambiguously boring duo Fucking the Virgin and Cornholing God. And as redwood ages on, The condom lies drying In the wastebasket.

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8 comments

[7] horus8 7-Mar-03/10:03 AM Reply
Dry semen, i feel, works much better then name dropping, or cornholing deities that simply just do not play a role any longer in our well being. God does not talk. No-doz? don't punk out, just take the real thing.
your imagery here, though fastly sought out i'm sure through hours of sleepless research. was like eating a mouthful of jelly beans, with meatloaf, and champagne while listening to Gobi desert sound bites on lsd and then sand papering ones elbows. Great job. 7.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-03/6:17 AM Reply
I like the way you've used the condom as a metaphor for your face. My face is moist and supple.
[8] nolan 3-May-03/10:18 PM Reply
classic. love the coffee reference
[n/a] LuckyJoe 28-Jul-03/6:27 PM Reply
Nice... not sure the whole meaning of the poem... but do we the readers truely have to understand to still enjoy poetry? Keep up the work and keep on writing.
[n/a] god'swife 31-Aug-03/12:33 AM Reply
This is just so horrible.
[n/a] DurtKL › god'swife 17-Sep-03/1:07 PM Reply
i know
[8] J.B. Manning 2-Sep-03/3:55 PM Reply
I like this. Very nice
[8] deleted user 8-Sep-03/10:08 PM Reply
"Eyes pulse to the beat
Of books, thicker than the Torah,
Dancing the tango with the
Hardy - Weinberg theorem."

Great word play. Hmmm..nice ending. :o