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2-Sep-03/3:57 PM |
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interesting. I like how it just radiates...for a moment.
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2-Sep-03/3:58 PM |
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nice, very nice. I like it.
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2-Sep-03/4:02 PM |
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Raw, angry, full of energy, which I like. Only, there are a few spelling errors and well, the construction could use some work. I'm all for raw passion, but I think it needs honing, like a sword.
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| Re: Back In Time by stolenpurity |
2-Sep-03/4:06 PM |
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bleh...cliche' without the cathy tune.
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| Re: Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe |
2-Sep-03/4:07 PM |
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| Re: Back In Time by stolenpurity |
2-Sep-03/4:09 PM |
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2-Sep-03/4:16 PM |
what's up with the statement about Romans and Chinese? I'm voting this a zero for that, though I think the overall quality of the poem would be good. Unless I'm misinterpreting your racism.
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2-Sep-03/4:19 PM |
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hmm, the redundancy didn't have it's effect on me. Short poem with less to say that it appears. Though the message is clear.
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2-Sep-03/4:23 PM |
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yeah, that's the last time I'll be clicking on anything with your name...
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| Re: Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge |
2-Sep-03/4:31 PM |
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This poem sucked. Both context and quality. Bleh.
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| Re: The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian |
2-Sep-03/4:40 PM |
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I can't believe anyone would give it a ten.
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2-Sep-03/4:45 PM |
I can't finish it. The rhythm is way to choppy. It needs major revision and you rhymed hand with husband. I can't go on...
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| Re: Nitemareweaver by William Delacroix |
2-Sep-03/4:52 PM |
The quality of the poem isn't that great. The feeling seems to be there, but I'm not sure you're feeling what you're saying, WHEN you're saying it.
As for electroman1979s comment, puke on you bible thumper.
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2-Sep-03/4:55 PM |
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| Re: Curiously here by philthegreek |
3-Sep-03/1:02 PM |
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hmmm. I'd say that this poem made me feel like nothing at all...just.............
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3-Sep-03/1:03 PM |
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3-Sep-03/1:04 PM |
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interesting form of self expression indeed. Strangely though, I like it.
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| Re: none by tadpole |
3-Sep-03/1:07 PM |
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interesting. It ALMOST works really well, but there is something about the ryme that feels forced. Like, it's not exactly what you wanted to say, but the only thing you could put there to complete the rythm. I think you can do better. Good though.
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3-Sep-03/1:12 PM |
Is this a pimple poem? Ok, I was going to give some gentle suggestions toward improvement until I read, "As long as this all was such." I don't think that is even English. As long as this all was such...makes me feel like I tripped on a speed bump and landed in glass-ridden gravel...and not on purpose either.
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| Re: Pray For Cum By JesusFreak (parody of CLS's pray for help) by DreamerSupreme |
3-Sep-03/1:17 PM |
ooooh, I love this one.
allow Your mushroom brush to paint me white - Oh man, that's like the second kewlest thing I've ever heard!
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