Free verse № 63575
Curiously here
What is it that makes me go back
To that place where moss grows
And no one lives except the memory
Etched deep in my brain of a sunset long ago
When water tasted sweet and the Sun
Was warm on my back and a young fresh girl
Was in my arms and all we did was make love
And talk and wonder what we would be doing when
We were old and grey
Came the day and it is difficult to see the
Man that was the boy so much has disappeared
How much of me is he and she is her and where
In the time gone by did we lose ourselves and become
What we are now.
I'm curious.
6 comments
can glean away some of the little words, to make it cut with a sharper edge?
and, the ending feels like a bit of a cop-out after that details you gave at first.
this has a lot of potential, especially since you have grasped the idea that specific details make a poem real.
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