Re: a comment on She washed over me by nentwined	19-Sep-04/10:48 PM
Thank you. Much work it needs, but you give hope. :)
Re: Easier To Say Good-bye by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:32 PM
a little less pretension could help this.
Re: Winters Death by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:31 PM
odd. I think better than a lot of your stuff simply through obfuscation and length.
Re: Anthony & Kimberly by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:29 PM
double meh.
Re: a comment on Devil's Palm by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:28 PM
ditto, ish, though workable is debatable.
Re: ~YOUR TURN~ by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:26 PM
a rambling rant, awkward flow, nothing new. try painting the picture of the person and situation that is causing these words to spew forth. make us feel the words instead of just throwing them out.
Re: a comment on ~Frosty~ by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:22 PM
b3cuz th3y hur+!
Re: Love Lie's In Misery by Brandy_n_Cali	7-Sep-04/8:19 PM
please, please, please learn how to pluralize words and what apostrophes are for! flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?
Re: abortion by darylchew	30-Aug-04/12:52 PM
awfully preachy. over-described.
Re: We are what we hold by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:36 PM
agree. not bad, not good. though perhaps you've spoiled me now on other poems of yours.
Re: A friendly conversation with a Native American by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:32 PM
I like it except for the one syllable of "Yeah" towards the end. Well, maybe the last three lines are a bit off for me. I think it works better without, though the tie-back to buffalo is nice.
Re: we can't walk forever by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:31 PM
you can. you can walk forever.
Re: metaphorically speaking by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:30 PM
evocative.
Re: TRUTH by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:29 PM
hilarious. :)
Re: My Soul is Stopping by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:28 PM
nice. -10-
Re: it's all quite obviously one big joke by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:27 PM
I really like the flow of this. Bits meander too much for me, but I like it.
Re: My chair by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:26 PM
I like it, though I do not get the _need_, which seems important to the piece as a whole.
Re: a comment on A Piñon Planter by Dovina	27-Aug-04/3:24 PM
mmhmm.
Re: a comment on Countervail by D. $ Fontera	27-Aug-04/3:03 PM
still not getting a coherent moment/story/thing. but thanks. :)
Re: solitude by darylchew	27-Aug-04/2:58 PM
amazingly cliche. a nearly perfect pimple.