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~YOUR TURN~ (Free verse) by Brandy_n_Cali
Shut Up Don't Talk Just Listen My turn to talk Your turn to listen Your turn to cry What? Why? Who am I? Who the hell are you? I won't, I can't just forget What the hell were you thinking? What was I thinking? I gave you too many chances You gave me too many excuses I have cried too much You have hurt me more than once I ignored the truth You broke your promises Time and time again Over and over All the same lies Same sad stories Your selfish decisions Your greedy ways I will not be cheated on anymore How can you say you love me? You don't know what love is! I will not be hurt again Not by you It's YOUR TURN What we had is gone It's Over Over for Good There is not a thing you can say Nothing you can do And as For ME, No More Crying Days

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.7615943
Overall Rank: 11673
Posted: August 31, 2004 4:34 PM PDT; Last modified: August 31, 2004 4:34 PM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.217.94 | 1-Sep-04/7:49 AM | Reply
A little too much piss or not enough vinegar, naybe some vodka would help.
[n/a] Brandy_n_Cali @ 4.182.93.60 | 1-Sep-04/6:02 PM | Reply
I think that when people comment on someone else's poems that they should explain what they are saying if it is comment that u dont normally hear or frase hardly used.
FOR EXAMPLE-Coments such as
"meh."
&
"Are you really 22 years old? Lord jesu's benevolent ball sack"
&
"A tic turd on high wip"
&
"A little too much piss or not enough vinegar, naybe some vodka would help"
[2] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 7-Sep-04/8:26 PM | Reply
a rambling rant, awkward flow, nothing new. try painting the picture of the person and situation that is causing these words to spew forth. make us feel the words instead of just throwing them out.
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