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metaphorically speaking (Free verse) by somemorepoetry You've been begging to leave
Since you saw that tree
Falling, falling, falling
If it can move
Why can't you
Your roots are deep
Your leaves are new
Forgive me
For wanting to cut you down
And burn you
I am cold
You are warm
Up the ladder:
The Ultimate Survivor
Down the ladder:
Week End Justification
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Posted: January 1, 2004 6:20 PM PST; Last modified: January 1, 2004 6:20 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.576303 Overall Rank: 2392 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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tuthaliash @ 63.198.141.118
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2-Jan-04/12:00 PM
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I get the feeling the message is opaque and personal (or maybe I'm just dense), but I like the imagery.
Starts and ends with a nice clear voice, but gets a bit confusing in the middle
evocative.
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