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Love Lie's In Misery (Free verse) by Brandy_n_Cali
Kissed by it's ruthless ways. Counting the month's then singling out
the days.
Forgive and forget, let's play the game. Confused by love, Who's the
one to blame?
Fearless tears that fall from their eyes. Pushed away, they begin to
die.
Caught up in misery, never thinking for the best. Disturbed by Love
and forgetting the rest.
You will never let love be the way it is. Let it go and be like this..
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Silence is all around, your one true love never found. Hoping to find
the one you have been looking for. But, through all the darkness you
have searched each and every door.
Further and further it will all fade away. Hold it all in and wait
for your time, for your day.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9124
Posted: September 7, 2004 7:40 PM PDT; Last modified: September 7, 2004 7:40 PM PDT
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flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?