Replying to a comment on:

Love Lie's In Misery (Free verse) by Brandy_n_Cali

Kissed by it's ruthless ways. Counting the month's then singling out the days. Forgive and forget, let's play the game. Confused by love, Who's the one to blame? Fearless tears that fall from their eyes. Pushed away, they begin to die. Caught up in misery, never thinking for the best. Disturbed by Love and forgetting the rest. You will never let love be the way it is. Let it go and be like this.. ... Silence is all around, your one true love never found. Hoping to find the one you have been looking for. But, through all the darkness you have searched each and every door. Further and further it will all fade away. Hold it all in and wait for your time, for your day.

nentwined 7-Sep-04/8:19 PM
please, please, please learn how to pluralize words and what apostrophes are for!

flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001