Re: corrupting you by skaskowski	27-Aug-04/2:56 PM
twisted. I like. :)
Re: Penumbra by klosterfobik	27-Aug-04/2:56 PM
another one for the love/above list! I like 'clandestine comet'.
Re: Eagledale Drive by klosterfobik	27-Aug-04/2:54 PM
very evocative, though I find I want to know more how you were lost. Is it just the time? I like the line "Can you believe the gray wind of used to be and winter?" "simple perfect" -> "simple perfection"? Or are you making a grammatical pun of some sort that I'm failing to get?
Re: A Piñon Planter by Dovina	27-Aug-04/2:51 PM
cute. odd. definitely a difficult subject matter to try to make someone take seriously. Delving into the bowels so explicity does not do it for me, I think. Bits here and there don't cohere for me.
Re: Rapid Eye Movement by wilco	27-Aug-04/2:49 PM
I think the title is too ... blatant ... for the rest of the poem. The poem is very nice. Agree with the semi-awkwardness of "nothing makes the night seem lonely like". Maybe just "nothing makes the night more lonely than"? Thoughts.
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	27-Aug-04/2:47 PM
very cute. tightly done. silly, but tightly done and in that silliness is a nice contrast.
Re: Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline) by DreamerSupreme	27-Aug-04/11:03 AM
boring and repetitive.
Re: Oh So Hollow by etherealmaiden	27-Aug-04/11:01 AM
the flow is very solid; the content blase.
Re: Countervail by D. $ Fontera	27-Aug-04/10:59 AM
I don't think I really get what this is saying.
Re: Smoking Skies by Enchantres	27-Aug-04/10:57 AM
breath -> breathe; it's -> its the rule to put a comma wherever you want a breath is simply wrong.
Re: Hold and hold me hold tight by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/10:55 AM
this is pretty cool. I was a bit worried by the gimmick early on, but... it flows nicely; definitely captures something and shares it. :)
Re: a comment on Where Have Equality Slipped Off To? by TLRufener	27-Aug-04/10:54 AM
agreed.
Re: Through Your Frown by Blindpoetry	26-Aug-04/2:53 PM
the flow/rhythm of this is lacking. the idea--I think I get what you're saying, but it takes inspection. The telling and showing seem to be confused--the telling superfluous, except tha the showing is hard to understand--but even then the telling doesn't help as much as it could. I'd say work more on visualizing what's going on--try to think a little less.
Re: Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer	26-Aug-04/1:16 PM
too much cliche, even if it does contain some of my favorite words.
Re: Knowledge has such high demands by Torok	26-Aug-04/12:28 PM
I carry my possession that you possess to church every day? I think this is supposed to be a semi-riddle on knowledge, but I do not see how to put all the pieces together.
Re: faces unknown by daggatolar	26-Aug-04/12:26 PM
"stairring" is something I'd never contemplated before. I really have _no idea_ how to read this. The words seem to strive for an entire lack of coherence.
Re: a comment on today the world is beauty by nentwined	29-Jul-04/1:49 PM
I wasn't really seeing any 'pretend' in the world. It was more an appreciation of nature's beauty than man's... and how I as a man (and more particularly as the man I am) couldn't hold a candle to the flame of a candle, or the simplest flower; and how even household names are nowhere near as long-lived as common grass. And things such as that. Perhaps.
Re: a comment on Beth by horus8	3-Jul-04/12:24 AM
well, then. the ranker has favorites, now. ;)
Re: Occam's Razor by Quarton	2-Jul-04/11:51 PM
cute. a bit wordy, and I know the poem's about one facet of that, but I still didn't want to wade through the whole thing; rhythm's a bit off for me in several places. If you meant this seriously, and I see that you don't, I'd have to argue that Occam's Razor is only towards the simplest _sufficient_ explanation, and that would apply to the simplifications you make--they're context-dependant, and so it's hard to see whether they're overly-simplified or not in usage. ;) Points for the blend, though.
Re: a comment on today the world is beauty by nentwined	2-Jul-04/11:56 AM
You know, I think you nailed it. Today, I feel like a baby infant.