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Smoking Skies (Free verse) by Enchantres
The smoking skies above, they whisper something.
Giving the trees something to breath.
The river who is close to me, is so cold.
I reach it gently with the palm of my hand.
And suddenly I see your reflection, slowly fading away.
So purely that I almost can't take it.
My heart is beating, fast.
As I fall into your fading reflection.
Water is surrounding me, in it's most purest form.
Taking me away from, me
I can't breath, but I do not mind.
Am I dead already?
I don't know.
We are one now, finally together,
after such a lonely time, being all alone.
Where will we go? Heaven?
Does it matter?
I say no
I can tell, you feel the same
Because the smoking skies above us, stopped whispering.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10252
Posted: August 25, 2004 1:41 PM PDT; Last modified: August 25, 2004 1:41 PM PDT
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"Taking me away from me" is good, minus the comma.
Pretty good overall.