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Beth (Lyric) by horus8
Beth has her bike, and long afternoons Cinema Fridays, and young lover's balloons Taller than mummy, but shorter than dad She's hipper than both, and up on the fads. There is dinner to make, and homework to do, Bad memories of last year, and all she went through But she never lost faith, or the love in her heart When death threatened to rip Beth's family apart. Down to the Sea Down to the shore Blaze Wilde and up Child, explore Ask the night It will teach you Ask the night Beth it knows Calling you out to see you and how your body grows. Smiling came easy, when dolphins still sang Girlfriends slept over, and warm morning rain But blood changes everything, forces tomorrow Beth is tasting the future and feeling its sorrow. Girls love their daddies, and that is expected To make them feel special, funny, protected Sometimes it is different, Sometimes it's reversed Life can be tragic, switching roles unrehearsed. Down to the Sea Down to the shore Blaze Wilde and up Child, implore Ask the night It will teach you Ask the night Beth, it knows Calling you out to see you and how your body grows. Your hair it will thicken Your breasts, they will fill Forever you'll hearken as a little girl still To the Sea, to your father To the men you will know And the love you'll be given From above and below. Beth has her bike, and long afternoons Cinema Fridays, and young lover's balloons Taller than mummy, but shorter than dad Beth's love is worth having, It is what we all had.

Up the ladder: 7 Days of Suicide
Down the ladder: Underneath This Burning Sun

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.9640274
Overall Rank: 128
Posted: April 8, 2004 1:32 PM PDT; Last modified: April 8, 2004 1:32 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 8-Apr-04/2:41 PM | Reply
I like this a lot. But please put a comma in "Ask the night Beth it knows." And the last line seems wrong, somehow, as if it should not be so positively convinced.
[9] nentwined @ 66.92.28.14 | 8-Apr-04/4:35 PM | Reply
"calling you out to see you" seems awkward flow. I like the overall rhythm that I'm reading this in.

This is truly beautiful. Perhaps a topic over-explored, with not much in content to step it above the rest, but the melody is sweet and haunting. :)
[9] nentwined @ 66.92.28.14 > nentwined | 8-Apr-04/4:36 PM | Reply
If poemranker had a 'favorites', I'd add this to mine. (hint to self)
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > nentwined | 8-Apr-04/5:29 PM | Reply
I second this.
[9] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 > Shuushin | 3-Jul-04/12:24 AM | Reply
well, then. the ranker has favorites, now. ;)
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 8-Apr-04/5:43 PM | Reply
I imagine some of the choppiness I read would be greatly smoothed by the singing of it.

it works; sure.
[10] Bluemonkey @ 170.141.68.2 | 15-Sep-04/12:32 PM | Reply
brilliant.
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