Youth

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Oct 2004 · 12 comments

Way back in the day, in the back alley way We'd get together and we'd play Smoking, Token, Coughing, Choken, Lying on the floor til our asses were broken Pile in the backseat of Mikey's car A drive across town felt like so far Rushing off into the night Racing faster than the speed of light We were just a bunch of kids getting wasted I had a future but I misplaced it We'll ditch back down this alley way Turn around and go back the other way We'd get back home and I'll sing another sad song About how mom and dad have no clue what's going on We were just a bunch of kids getting wasted I had a future but I misplaced it Racing faster than the speed of light Rushing off into the night

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[9] Dovina 14-Oct-04/5:52 PM Reply

Adolescence hits boys harder than girls. We bleed a little and breasts pop out, but boys are crazed with madness.

[9] Dan garcia-Black 14-Oct-04/7:30 PM Reply

"bunch of kids getting wasted I had a future but I misplaced it"
Great line.

[7] Rollsoftoiletpaper 16-Oct-04/5:27 PM Reply

Dig it.

[6] fevriere 17-Oct-04/10:58 AM Reply

I don't think the repetition works, the speed of light line annoys me. And drop "token" for something else. That line could be the real hook but I feel the whole thing's not quick as catchy as you want it to be. As it could be.

[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › fevriere 19-Oct-04/5:06 PM Reply

Thanks for your thoughts, I'm sure you thought 'quick' hard about this. "Token" is quite literally what we were doing in the back streets. Trust me 'speed of light' sounds a lot better than "going a hundred fifty two, not stopping for the lights red and blue", and the repetition is a reflexion(kinda of ties the title down).

<3 Jason

[6] fevriere › thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Oct-04/5:01 AM Reply

I never heard anyone use the word token like that before. I'm glad you feel you can justify everything that's in there - that's the mark of a satisfied poet. You're lucky.

[n/a] zodiac › fevriere 21-Oct-04/5:31 AM Reply

Don't give in so easily. He probably meant "tokin'", like what you do to a marijuana cigarette.

Besides, in order to be "quite literally...doing" token, he'd probably have to be participating in some wacky obscure "fad" dance involving lying under-foot, alternated with rolling around in various slots.

[6] fevriere › zodiac 21-Oct-04/5:32 AM Reply

Well, "tokin'" makes a lot more sense. But it rightly rhymes with both "smokin'" and "chokin'", so I'm well satisfied.

[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › zodiac 21-Oct-04/4:30 PM Reply

A Token is, an item used in place of something else. Tokin, is the smoking of hashish cigarettes(or in our case depending on your coastline pipes/bowls). Its placement was intentional, whether you choose to believe so or not.

[10] arduinn 20-Oct-04/7:26 PM Reply

Don't change anything.. I think it's already good.

[8] juliharrelson 19-Mar-05/7:45 PM Reply

awesome. Good grief, man! This is really good stuff.

[0] Edna Sweetlove 23-May-06/10:23 AM Reply

I could only get as far as the first few lines. When I read words like "choken" I give up. Also I am sad your donkeys are broken.