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A Piñon Planter (Free verse) by Dovina With chagrin, the raven flies
over land of enchanted scrub.
To higher ground he soars
where ruby sun glistens
on purple rounded hills
below rugged piney mountains
that looked to men of old
like the shed Saviorâs blood.
To seven thousand feet he climbs
upward, thin air, Santa Fe.
Planting pine nuts lower
is for the average crowd of birds.
Oh, he feels it starting
deep in nut-filled bowel
the birth of a piñon tree
planted on higher ground.
Up the ladder:
Clay Man
Down the ladder:
Working at the Garden Market
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Dan garcia-Black @ 68.120.43.145
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24-Aug-04/7:40 PM
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I printed this poem out and went to the restroom to read it. As it came to it's climax, my nut-filled bowl came to its own. Oh was that bowel? Nuts! Good. No, really! -10- Now I'll go back to wipe.
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Dovina @ 17.255.240.138
> Dan garcia-Black
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25-Aug-04/5:10 PM
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For whatever use this or any poem may find, including something to wipe with, it pales compared to the pure joy of writing it and seeing somebody notice.
Beautiful...
Really?
Yes.
Wait... no.
cute. odd. definitely a difficult subject matter to try to make someone take seriously. Delving into the bowels so explicity does not do it for me, I think. Bits here and there don't cohere for me.
Iâm appalled that my raven, with his physical adversity, and his noble rising above the common crowd of ravens, did not inspire the same admiration we bestow on certain Olympic athletes who, in spite of injury, disease and economic poverty rise to glory.
mmhmm.
As I said: Not your best, but still one of the top 5 I've read today (Excluding the Dylan Thomas).
I will assume you have read more than five today. Thanks.
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