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Where Have Equality Slipped Off To? (Free verse) by TLRufener Where has equality slipped off to
We fought so hard to change the world
But somehow we have still failed to win
Women are still servants and slaves
Men still rule the world
When will I wake up from this nightmare
Even the angel child has turned against me
Imitating the unequal fiend beside me
She understands not, he remembers not
She is too young, and he faults just as I do
Where has equality slipped off to
When a different view labels you as wrong
There must be just one way down the road
I am obviously walking the opposite direction
No matter what I will not turn around
Up the ladder:
Person
Down the ladder:
Frenulum
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Posted: August 25, 2004 4:56 PM PDT; Last modified: August 25, 2004 4:56 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7949 Comments:
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Christof @ 217.44.71.112
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26-Aug-04/7:34 AM
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I admire the spirit behind this but the expression is too simplistic and cliched to really make me feel the force of the poem. This states a case rather than creating an imaginative response to inequality; perhaps you could try creating a character or a voice that expresses what you mena without resorting to bald declarations?
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nentwined @ 66.92.28.14
> Christof
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27-Aug-04/10:54 AM
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agreed.
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