Poemranker [Poem: Aeuphoria] [by MacFrantic] Thu Apr 25 08:41:35 PDT 2024

The conventional lightness what brings me under behind the thunder tightness The stalking eventide what sends things awry shan't soon die 'tis inside

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Overall Rank: 7946

Posted: January 19, 2005 11:46 AM PST; Last modified: January 19, 2005 11:46 AM PST
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[8] Shuushin @ 64.223.173.89 | 19-Jan-05/7:57 PM | Reply

"things awry" is a little vague, don't you think - maybe a missed opportunity given the sparseness here.

I think its better without that last line, really.

[7] dclark @ 67.140.205.248 | 8-Aug-07/7:41 PM | Reply

maybe change thunder to rumble, that rhymes to simple, stick with the vowels they drag it out better, ya know?

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