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Aeuphoria (Free verse) by MacFrantic

The conventional lightness what brings me under behind the thunder tightness The stalking eventide what sends things awry shan't soon die 'tis inside

dclark 8-Aug-07/7:41 PM
maybe change thunder to rumble, that rhymes to simple, stick with the vowels they drag it out better, ya know?




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