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Aeuphoria (Free verse) by MacFrantic

The conventional lightness what brings me under behind the thunder tightness The stalking eventide what sends things awry shan't soon die 'tis inside

Shuushin 19-Jan-05/7:57 PM
"things awry" is a little vague, don't you think - maybe a missed opportunity given the sparseness here.

I think its better without that last line, really.




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