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abortion

by darylchew

Member since 2004 · Posted 28 Aug 2004 · 19 comments

kill me break my bones. suck me in they shall revel in my bloody demise bathe in my blood feast on my meat forgotten, i will be only to be remembered, in nightmares and sweaty bedsheets (for your conscience haunts) what were you thinking, on that day that created me? a moment of blunder, impatience screw you. body flung through windshield. rest in peace; i will for, my death is avenged.

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[9] Dovina 28-Aug-04/2:20 PM Reply
Sounds like an angry prayer. How is your death avenged?
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 28-Aug-04/6:09 PM Reply
By flinging the aborter through the windshield, of course.
[9] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/6:15 PM Reply
Then who flung it, and how is that revenge?
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 28-Aug-04/6:16 PM Reply
The aborted foetus flung it. It's revenge because the foetus was well pissed off at being aborted.
[9] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/6:38 PM Reply
I read it again that way and it makes a lot of sense, even the Yoda voice. I raised it to 9.
[n/a] darylchew › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/9:59 PM Reply
....you actually understood what i meant. thanks. it's rather supernatural.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › darylchew 29-Aug-04/4:26 AM Reply
If current trends in abortion continue, do you think there will come a day when all the aborted foeti come back to bite us? Also, do you think that every time we abort something, we are also aborting a bit of ourselves?
[n/a] darylchew › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 29-Aug-04/6:32 AM Reply
they wont literally come and bite us. but probably more of our conscience doing the work. guilt is a powerful tool. but if the foeti really come back it'll be really cool. ><. everytime we abort A FOETUS (take note it is not someTHING), of course we are aborting a part of ourselves. it is our own flesh and blood for god's sake. the foetus lived in OUR wombs.
[n/a] deleted user › darylchew 30-Aug-04/5:27 AM Reply
I have never been pregnant myself and due to some horrible accident at birth will probably never be. However I feel a certain part of me has died when hark the dire whining sound of abortion cometh from my bowels.
[n/a] zodiac › deleted user 31-Aug-04/1:44 AM Reply
Was that "horrible accident" congenital virginity stemming from prenatal unattractiveness?
[n/a] deleted user › zodiac 31-Aug-04/8:26 AM Reply
err... no. It was being born a man.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/6:15 PM Reply
Foetal rage from beyond the grave is a touching topic. And the yoda-like dialogue - "forgotten, I will be" - was a nice touch. Shame about the "all lower case" and "arbitrary line breaks", though :( -10-
[n/a] darylchew › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/10:01 PM Reply
i will take note.
[7] Prince of Void 29-Aug-04/6:48 AM Reply
that's was good ..
[9] TAMARAG67 29-Aug-04/7:06 PM Reply
powerful and haunting
[9] BigB 30-Aug-04/6:45 AM Reply
*shivers* the silent scream?
[n/a] darylchew › BigB 30-Aug-04/7:45 AM Reply
haha yeah thats where i got my inspiration from.
[2] nentwined 30-Aug-04/12:52 PM Reply
awfully preachy. over-described.
[n/a] darylchew › nentwined 31-Aug-04/10:52 AM Reply
nentwined, i appreciate your existence.