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abortion (Free verse) by darylchew

kill me break my bones. suck me in they shall revel in my bloody demise bathe in my blood feast on my meat forgotten, i will be only to be remembered, in nightmares and sweaty bedsheets (for your conscience haunts) what were you thinking, on that day that created me? a moment of blunder, impatience screw you. body flung through windshield. rest in peace; i will for, my death is avenged.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-04/6:15 PM
Foetal rage from beyond the grave is a touching topic. And the yoda-like dialogue - "forgotten, I will be" - was a nice touch. Shame about the "all lower case" and "arbitrary line breaks", though :( -10-




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