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it's all quite obviously one big joke (Free verse) by somemorepoetry
You ask if I have seen the lonely fields where
The gravestones dot the horizon like birthday candles
Celebrating another year of death
The sun was set on fire by the grass that
You set on fire when you said it was time to celebrate
Another year alive with a beer and a box of matches
That sounds like fun, like a day at the beach
Like that time the moon was blacked out
When we leaned against yourâ68 to see the stars
The city lights never fade when the last cigarette
Goes out like I thought they would since it was
The ashes glowing inches from your lips that burned brightest
The birthday candles were brightest when my parents
Turned out the kitchen lights and let me blow out
The cake that never tasted like I thought it should
If my favorite collie is buried by my house
Theyâll have to move my stone bench to lay him
Six feet below but I doubt theyâll go that deep
Only my mother was set to rest that far down
Where worms and microbes pretend they can play
Like toddlers among the dead
That tree where the swing lolled in the summer gaze
Of my sister laughing at the kids from down the road
Trying to climb its rope to the top where theyâd fall
No one ever fell from the top and cracked their skull
On the knots peeking out of the grass and
Sitting like trolls frozen at high-noon
Quick-Draw always made a fool of himself
Before I had a popsicle and lemonade
With Billy, the kid whose dad was a veteran
We climbed the hill to get a better look
At the baseball diamond where the older boys
Spat and slapped their gloves and kicked at the sand
Then we turned and went back home, back
Down the hill past a couple of trees that
You said reminded you of lions because of their golden leaves
There was no road to follow from the hill
To my house but we made our way sure enough
By the sunset dragonfliesâ humming and hunting
Then, in the end, we came home and had another
Drink of lemonade and snack of animal crackers
Before you had to go down the road to go to bed
Yes, the field does burn like a cigarette when the moon is gone
When the dragonflies stop buzzing, I can see through the
Trees the stars, like birthday candles, guiding me to my grave
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Arithmetic Mean: 8.375
Weighted score: 5.907677
Overall Rank: 1451
Posted: December 15, 2003 8:25 PM PST; Last modified: December 21, 2003 9:22 PM PST
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Other than that very good, especially the flow and line breaks.