| Re: a comment on Hewed by horus8 |
3-Jan-03/12:55 AM |
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Thanks H, I am still doing my project but I have to look for a new job as I work in the travel industry and reduncies are imminent as soon as my ship is ready to sail again I'm ready for the big blue, you can trust me and we'll share the piggy back rides and show St Christopher how to carry people through troubled waters upon the blades of shoulders cut to the bone from the constance of the restless relentless.
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| Re: The world by Sugarbbybuttrfly |
2-Jan-03/5:27 AM |
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Not too bad but book should be replaced by endless lines that frown upon mankind, but its your baby, think you should play around with this it could be VERY good instead of well - good ! heres a 7
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| Re: Forgotten by famenglory |
2-Jan-03/5:24 AM |
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| Re: Hewed by horus8 |
2-Jan-03/4:14 AM |
This gripped me like a hangmans noose. Horus this is captivating, Did you write this non stop in some kind of emotional spontaneous combustion? The relationship with your father made the pips in my adams explode **FUCK*** this was one work where the reader is consumed by the subjects in the story, my initial reaction was 'shit its a long one' but like a good book you can't put it down.
When your hearts open horus your one of the best on this site. I dont think you need to be affected by comments on your poems, do not react other than in your writing that is your gifted forte.
I respect this work, its up their with the one you wrote about your children, yet this shows you as the son, the man, and the kindred spirit you have no choice in being. Your work is an illustration of darkness but the clarity in the way you tell it makes it shine, pardon the cliches but a poetic synopsis of your work is apt for a piece as honest and reflective as this.
This is your Golden Q Tip award for showing a side of man most conceal =======10======= (like you probably give a fuck)
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| Re: Wanking by Bobjim |
30-Dec-02/10:04 AM |
easy come, easy go,
whip it or flip it
sexy snow
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| Re: Blues by Christof |
30-Dec-02/9:14 AM |
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| Re: Frozen Angel by Ranger |
30-Dec-02/8:39 AM |
I wrote serpent of my bliss based on this (behold a short poem in telling you)
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| Re: Splendid Discovery by blkarakagain |
23-Dec-02/3:53 AM |
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I like your writing it has a naked unimitable style but think if you condensed some of your work it would assault the senses more. I cant help but laugh in disbelief at the 0 vote, people spend so much time creating their best for a split second vote violating junkie - have what it deserves a 6 with potential
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| Re: Foreplay by INTRANSIT |
23-Dec-02/3:44 AM |
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This is cruel man, not foreplay, you do all that to her then say goodbye -your a bad man I/T, the end kinda works though, and one enjoyed it did one. -7-
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| Re: "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus |
20-Dec-02/5:28 AM |
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god that was disgusting i apologize -DOCCCCCC !
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| Re: "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus |
20-Dec-02/5:27 AM |
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The worse thing to eat with nuts has to be cheese.
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| Re: THE PRICE OF LIVING FOREVER by LETO |
20-Dec-02/5:26 AM |
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Like a methsulah, if i could be a tree it would be a palm tree on a nudist beach. This was simple, aeroplane poetry but i liked it a lot. -7-
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| Re: THE PRICE OF LIVING FOREVER by LETO |
20-Dec-02/5:26 AM |
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Like a methsulah, if i could be a tree it would be a palm tree on a nudist beach. This was simple, aeroplane poetry but i liked it a lot. -7-
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| Re: The Dance by Quarton |
20-Dec-02/5:17 AM |
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A thoughtful piece of lit, well done sir.
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| Re: DESERVING NOTHING MORE THAN LONLYNESS by LETO |
20-Dec-02/5:13 AM |
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a good poem but marred by interruptions while reading due to the grammar, spelling. I too have been damned for the same wrong, not bad -6-
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| Re: When Im Gone by New Life Drug |
20-Dec-02/4:45 AM |
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| Re: The Lordy only knows why tornados have no nose by Bachus |
20-Dec-02/4:44 AM |
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I gotta love ya ! wonder how many kids twisters spawned?
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| Re: the feeling was never there by blackball |
20-Dec-02/4:43 AM |
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Distinctive,poignant a fine read -8-
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| Re: a comment on March by <~> |
19-Dec-02/9:26 AM |
Whats a hard on? my brother says he has them and they bruise his knees
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| Re: Trust by hobojo |
19-Dec-02/9:15 AM |
I dont always vote on the whole poem and this one by you is a classic example why.
Stanza 1 nothing wrong with it.
its a bit generalistic and wishy washy from there.
However I wrote a whole poem last week around 2 lines i wrote from a poem 10 years ago, it was well received on here so just remember all the poetry you write is good because you write it, the key is finding the path to peoples empathy and originating a unique style that people buy. Anyway happy holiday hobojo, 0 votes fly around on this site like tears in a pram its not bad ---5
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