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Blues (Free verse) by Christof Come back to me, woman,
because that catch in the breath -
when the lung puckers slightly
and pinches itself
and just for a moment
a fraction of life lightly
skips before the eyes -
has extended for a month now.
This is serious, woman,
I am literally blue.
Up the ladder:
bluebells and none
Down the ladder:
Bandages of the Beast
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.45
Posted: December 30, 2002 3:53 AM PST; Last modified: December 30, 2002 3:53 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.4286585 Overall Rank: 3024 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.35.159.3
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30-Dec-02/4:12 AM
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Think. Feel. Explore.
Read my poem entitled Blue Balls....this is good.. you get 8.5
Marvellous
Looking at love from a different angle -cool i like it
sax-a-poet, well done
this is so...well, literal. for you, especially.
fan TASTIQUE!
breathlessness will do it. this does
Very very good.
very nice!10
Ah - the old post-Christmas depression? This has intensity yet comedy. I hope it is not too autobiographical.
Hey Christof it's nice to see you're back, submit something soon!
I'd like to submit something soon but I have the mother of all writer's blocks! Just nothing is coming out at the moment that I would want to put out for other people to read. This always happens to me - six months on, a year off. Does it happen to anyone else?
Don't worry, mate! I'm sure you'll be a popular poete in no time! Why not write about what you did on the weekend? Or how about writing about something that interests you? A hobby, perhaps. Or even your favorite T.V show! The possibilities are endless!!!!111
I've felt that!! The puckering lung, both physical and emotional. Dead serious and hilarious at the same time.
Giving you tens (and here's another one) is screwing the bell curve, so just post some substandard work as therapy for your writer's block and everything will be just fine! 315 view(s)
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